The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. Summarise the information by seclecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. Summarise the information by seclecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph shows the fluctuation of fertility in China and the USA during the period from 1992 to 2000. It is obvious that both nations had significant changes in the birth rate during that time, with lows in 1940s and highs in 1950.
From approximately 10% in 1920, the birth rates in China fluctuated and reach 15% in 1935 and then decreased rapidly to 5% in 1940s. After that period, the rates gradually increased and reach the peek of 20% in 1950, following by a period of decline.
There was a vary in the birth rates from 1920 to 1935 in the USA, from about 11% to 13% respectively. The birth rates then went down rapidly from 1935 and reach only 5% in 1945. Prior to 1950, the rates raise slowly and got the highest at 1950, which was 15%. The latter half century, the birth rates in the USA was reduce to about 7% in 2000.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 206, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1940s'.
Suggestion: in the 1940s
... birth rate during that time, with lows in 1940s and highs in 1950. From approximately ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 124, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1940s'.
Suggestion: in the 1940s
...n 1935 and then decreased rapidly to 5% in 1940s. After that period, the rates gradually...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 11, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...wing by a period of decline. There was a vary in the birth rates from 1920 to 1935 in...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'reduced'.
Suggestion: reduced
...century, the birth rates in the USA was reduce to about 7% in 2000.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 675.0 965.302439024 70% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.29936305732 4.92477711251 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.17867915624 2.65546596893 82% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 106.607317073 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528662420382 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 180.9 283.868780488 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.5669638012 43.030603864 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.375 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 5.23603664747 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201879017365 0.215688989381 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100194718636 0.103423049105 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490299205013 0.0843802449381 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144540328937 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273757655387 0.0819641961636 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 13.2329268293 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 86.03 61.2550243902 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.3012195122 58% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.66 11.4140731707 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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