Do you agree or disagree with "WATCHING TELEVISION IS BAD FOR CHILDREN"
Watching television is difinitely bad for children. I do agree with this statement. Reseachers have studied and analyied about this bad habit of watching television for children. Experts say that children learn very quickly from television wheather it is good or bad. There are some reasons why television is bad for children. Lack of interaction between parents and others, more of violence and sexual images, television addiction steals study time and being creative, more isolated, Tent to eat more junk food, No physical activity.
First of all, Lack of interaction between parents and others. If children sit on front of television they pay less attention to what their parents say or ignore them. For example, my neighbour's kid is 4 yrs old, he never replies to his parents talk at the first time. Because he is so involed on his cartoon show that, once i went to their palce and he didn't even noticed i was at their place. Further more, now television cables have hundreds of channels and childerns are so much exposed to violence and sexual images. This bad exposure effects a lot to their brain and children tent to imitate whatever they watch or listen. This seriously effects to their growth.
Secondly, Television addition steals children's precious study time and being more creative on painting, drawing, crafts and many more. Telvision reduces their reading skill and practice. For example reading short story books helps children to gain knowledge and be active. They show intersets on other activities and make them less isolated. Isolation makes children less communicative, lack of interests and motivation. According to the pediatrics journal, each hour infront of televison increases child's changes of attention deficit disorder.
Thirdly, Children tent to eat more junk food while watching television. For example, they watch junk food adversiments like sugar candy, soft drinks many more. My neighour's kid is so much addicted to soft drinks, he won't listen to this parents. If parents refuse to give he cries and acts wildly until he gets whatever he asks for. Further more, this inactiveness or isolation leads to no physical activity. Children eat more junk food without any physical activity and become obese. For example, now a days children wants to play video game rather then going out to play with other kids. In my genration we used to play lot of outdoor and indoor games. outdoor games like badminton, cricket, running race, etc. Indoor games like chess, word building games. But this genration children don't even know the names of the sports which our genration used to play.
In conculsion, Watching television is very bad for children's health like eating junks. No communication with outside world like being isolated. No sprots activity all these are very dangerous to children's mental and physical growth.
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Sentence: Watching television is difinitely bad for children.
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Sentence: Reseachers have studied and analyied about this bad habit of watching television for children.
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Sentence: Experts say that children learn very quickly from television wheather it is good or bad.
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Sentence: Because he is so involed on his cartoon show that, once i went to their palce and he didn't even noticed i was at their place.
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Sentence: Further more, now television cables have hundreds of channels and childerns are so much exposed to violence and sexual images.
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Sentence: They show intersets on other activities and make them less isolated.
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Sentence: According to the pediatrics journal, each hour infront of televison increases child's changes of attention deficit disorder.
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Sentence: In my genration we used to play lot of outdoor and indoor games. outdoor games like badminton, cricket, running race, etc. Indoor games like chess, word building games.
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Sentence: But this genration children don't even know the names of the sports which our genration used to play.
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Sentence: In conculsion, Watching television is very bad for children's health like eating junks.
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Sentence: No sprots activity all these are very dangerous to children's mental and physical growth.
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