Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising can tell you a lot about a country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays advertising is one of the most important things for each country and people whole the world, because with referring to ads we can become aware of many important aspects of each society and country, aspects such as peoples merits, concerns and also it shows whether people tend to be affluent .So I am certainly agree with this statement that advertisement helps us to know about a country.
By looking to each countries advertisement we can find out merits and values of society, advertisement can illustrate the importance of merits like environment, charity, health, education or religion on a country .For example in some countries advertising focused on charity and so televiewer can absorb it charity and helping poor are a merit on that country, as well as another country which value health or education.
Another important matter which can understand from ads is peoples concern and their desire in life .With noticing to tiny issues we can find out peoples wishes about freedom, success and improvement, for instance: suppose a automobile factory which designs a new car but we see advertising of that car in each country is vary, in some countries they show car driven in a beautiful highway or in shoreline , since that countries peoples concern is freedom ,in contrast in some countries that car shown near the pretty villa or as a car of success manager, due to peoples concern on these countries is success.
Last and very interesting thing can derive from ads is the peoples economic condition because the content of ads prepared for the average people of that country and shows their daily life. for example in Third World countries ads concentration is on food and nutrition as a result of poverty , conversely in Europe ads filled with a variety of cars , airlines and tours because of peoples welfare.
It seems to me advertisement is like a window onto the life of a country. We can learn a lot about a country with noticing to advertisement of that country because it shows peoples value, concern and their affluent in daily life.
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Sentence: Nowadays advertising is one of the most important things for each country and people whole the world, because with referring to ads we can become aware of many important aspects of each society and country, aspects such as peoples merits, concerns and also it shows whether people tend to be affluent.
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Suggestion: Refer to peoples and merits
So I am certainly agree with this statement
Suggestion: So I certainly agree with this statement
Sentence: By looking to each countries advertisement we can find out merits and values of society, advertisement can illustrate the importance of merits like environment, charity, health, education or religion on a country.
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Sentence: For example in some countries advertising focused on charity and so televiewer can absorb it charity and helping poor are a merit on that country, as well as another country which value health or education.
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Sentence: Another important matter which can understand from ads is peoples concern and their desire in life.
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Sentence: We can learn a lot about a country with noticing to advertisement of that country because it shows peoples value, concern and their affluent in daily life.
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Suggestion: people's value
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