Some people believe the range of technology available to individuals today is increasing the gap between poor people and rich people. Others think it is having an opposite effect. Discuss these points of view. What is your opinion?
In recent times, technological advancement has been in the limelight and has aroused the wide concern. Although some people are of the fervent conviction that the technological development has led all humans to better, even the deprived ones, I would argue that the gap between poor people and rich people is being raised by the available of individual’s high-tech facilities.
On the one hand, there are many reasons why the technological advancement is proven to bring numerous merits for low-income people. In the past, the deprived ones could not approach the high quality education system, which is changing significantly. In recent times, numerous courses from the education websites of famous universities over the world allow students to enroll without any fees. To exemplify, information technology students from the developing countries could take part in courses from international education websites such as Udemy, Coursera, TreeHouse to learn particular program languages and obtain valuable certificates after completing the courses, which sets the pivotal platform for the future career. As a result, a percentage of people assume that the development of technology enhances the quality of life of social.
On the other hand, those who believe that by development of technology, the rich have gained more beneficial have their own reasons. Firstly, the more luxury goods are produced by different companies, the more the more well-to-do citizens have more choices to purchase more variety of magnificent items. To take a concrete example, the Apple company, a well-known high-tech firm in Silicon Valley, has produced a new version of smart phones as well as smart watch with the prices of over 2000 USD. Therefore, only wealth people with tremendous saving could buy it. Secondly, technological facilities from hospital could treat a range of serious diseases with the high cost, which is only affordable for the wealthy. The poor ones, especially from the developing countries, suffer the severe pain or even die because of the lack of money.
In conclusion, while the notion of strengthening quality of life by technological development is worthwhile in the view of some people, there are more convincing reasons why the available of individual’s high-tech facilities raises the gap between the deprived people and the wealthy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'the more'.
Suggestion: the more
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45081967213 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02974913093 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540983606557 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.4808057775 49.4020404114 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.5 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1428571429 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.85714285714 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205347339509 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681765485295 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807444786265 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152245205896 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0833837294406 0.056905535591 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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