Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior
The author states two opinions which people have about what influences children more, increasing violence in media or parents and peer groups.I subscribe to the view that children are more influenced by parental and peer groups than media though both do have a substantial effect on the lives of children.
Who we talk to and share our thoughts with, and who we spend our time with is what plays one of the most important role in our lives. Our peer groups and parents are the ones we interact with and learn from.Children being younger and less mature tend to be influenced by their surroundings m...
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