Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person.
Use specific reasons and examples.
People may have different opinion on this matter.Some people think that uneducated person can not teach to the educated person .However, Personally,I disagree with the notion that an uneducated person can teach an educated person.For me this means, people who have will to do things they can do by trial and error, learn while growing in that environment and learn through repeated doing and can develop needed skills and also can teach to the educated person.
To begin with, I think that even though not being educated from the formal school, people can enhance the skills in their preferred area.For example, a good friend of mine, who has not gone to school for learning about company but always keep interest to run company.After a couple of trial and error , he became success in establishing his own business on bookshop .Now he is able to teach other people even if they are highly educated.
In addition to trial and error in preferred field,I find that people learn much skills from their environment while during the time of growing. As an personal example, I live with my parents and they both are business person.I learned a lot skills about cosmetics business from them while day to day conversation and exposes in the business conducted by them, even- though not taking business subject in my school. Now, my friend says that I have more skills and knowledge than my business graduated friend.I have confidence how to run cosmetics and I can teach these things to educated person as well.
Finally, in combination of trial and error learning, and learning from the environment where they grown up,people learn from repeatedly visiting areas and also can teach to their superiors and even highly educated person.For example,my mom make lot tastier and highly nutritious food by getting knowledge and experience from restaurant where she work.With more practice of daily work She knows all the steps fluently and also can teach to highly educated person.However,She has not attended the school for learning those skills, she can teach to the educated person.
To sum up, In considering education and skills, I have explored the points that people learn from trial and error, enhance the skills where they grown up in the same environment and and can learn from repeatedly visited places if the people have will to do something, they can do and even teach to educated person
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Sentence: For example, my mom make lot tastier and highly nutritious food by getting knowledge and experience from restaurant where she work.
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Description: The fragment mom make lot is rare
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Sentence: To sum up, In considering education and skills, I have explored the points that people learn from trial and error, enhance the skills where they grown up in the same environment and and can learn from repeatedly visited places if the people have will to do something, they can do and even teach to educated person.
Description: The fragment they grown up is rare
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No. of Words: 414 350
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No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.688 4.6
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No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.388 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.59 0.50
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