The two map indicate the development of island ,after the construction of some tourist amenities. As can be seen from two maps,the island undergo significant changes with some entertainment accommodation and services growing.
To specific, ever having trees in the east of the map ,this place show the birth of the tiny hotel which built in a circle . In addition,no sooner have the bigger houses built such as restaurant and reception places than the footpath and vehicle track are constructed to communicate the social network. Meanwhile,due to the demand of travelers increase more than ever ,the pier was erected in the southeast of the map. By comparison ,the rate of growth in the east is slower when only swimming is the main entertain activity and the similar to the west where trees remain unchanged.
In blief ,the island , over the period of construction ,become more modern ,exept for the west and the east which extend a bit
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Sentence: The two map indicate the development of island ,after the construction of some tourist amenities.
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Sentence: To specific, ever having trees in the east of the map ,this place show the birth of the tiny hotel which built in a circle .
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Sentence: In blief ,the island , over the period of construction ,become more modern ,exept for the west and the east which extend a bit
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