The following appeared in a memo from the chairperson of the school board in the town of Utica.
“For the past six years, Coach Mauro has been the football coach at Silver Lake High School, and during that time the football team from Silver Lake High has won three national football championships. In addition, the number of fans attending each football game has increased dramatically, and the concession stands are bringing in significantly more money. Due to such success at Silver Lake High, the Utica school board should hire Coach Mauro to organize and manage all high school football programs for the entire Utica school system.”
Critique the reasoning used in this argument. You are not being asked to discuss your point of view on the argument. You should identify and analyze the central elements of the argument, the underlying assumptions that are being made, and any supporting information that is given. Your critique can also discuss other information that would strengthen or weaken the argument or make it more logical.
In the passage, the author concludes that Coach Mauro should be hired by Utica school board to organize and manage football programs of entire Utica school system. The conclusion is unsubstantiated with evidences and author makes assumptions that coach Mauro is solely responsible for the success of Silver lake high school football .The author further persuades by making assumptions that the number of fans attending the game have increased and also improved financial status. The conclusion is too strong by assuming that the football game was organized and managed by Coach Mauro.
Firstly, the...
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Sentence: There may other factors like good facilities in Silver High School, good skilled football players for the years when 3 National football Championships were won, etc. The author does not provide evidence to support that coach Mauro is solely responsible for winning national championships.
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