Integrated Essay
The reading passage claims that Christopher Columbus was a hero man with respect to American's inhabitants and the person who discovered America. while the lecture refutes what mentioned by the author.
The article states that the Christopher Columbus was and still as the hero with respect to the American’s inhabitants, because he contributed in the birth of United States, and provides three reasons of support. However the professor explains that what mentioned in the reading passage was not true and refutes each of the authors’ reasons.
First, the reading claims that Columbus was the symbols of progress and he interested in the freedom and seeking of new land plus he was a courageous man. The professor refutes this point by saying the priority of the Columbus was how to achieve the profit, he employed in the king of Spain as a businessman. He states that Columbus interested in buying gold and silver and not the liberty.
Second, the article posits that the Columbus was and still famous person, despite in the separation of American continent into two: north and south, both of them are under his name. However, the professor says that American discovered before the Columbus sailed in Blue Ocean in 1492. According to the professor Vikings arrived to Eastern Canada before Columbus shows up.
Third, the reading says that Columbus is one of nation’s fathers and he is a hero and the one that called with the freedom and independence. The professor opposes this point by explain that Columbus concerned in gathering a money, and if he failed in founding silver and expensive materials to sell it, he take a number of person about 25 to Spain and buy them here under the name of slavery.
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Sentence: The professor opposes this point by explain that Columbus concerned in gathering a money, and if he failed in founding silver and expensive materials to sell it, he take a number of person about 25 to Spain and buy them here under the name of slavery.
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to by and explain
Description: The fragment he take a is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace take with verb, past tense
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 12
No. of Words: 257 250
No. of Characters: 1217 1200
No. of Different Words: 129 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.004 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.735 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.487 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.665 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.431 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.674 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.227 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4