Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while other think it is unfair.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Today, it is evidently noticed that public awareness regarding money earned from different majors, has substantially increased in comparison with a recent past. However, making money from sports seems easy, it can be seen as a valid means of paying inadequate attention to other professional fields.
A chief reason for the supporters, who hold this notion that sportive persons deserve the great profit, is that they enjoy watching sports even if they won't be paid for what they like. On one hand, they believe that the task is counted as one of the hardships they never could success; So they a...
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Sentence: On one hand, they believe that the task is counted as one of the hardships they never could success; So they are available to be ranked less paid than athletes who do the hard works.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to could and success
Sentence: They quote that if a sport man fail in a game, nothing crucial would happen while this could be terrible if a manager fail in a project peak or a sugar couldn't pan out in a surgery.
Description: The fragment man fail in is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace fail with verb, past participle
Sentence: Brief and to the point, the both view are respectable if only make us to live in balance rather than in extremes.
Description: The fragment the both view is not usually followed by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is
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