Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?
Nowadays increasing number of traffic congestion and its negative effects are one of the indispensable issues, thus governments endeavor to reduce traffic problems and the level of pollution made by them. Although there can be a variety of possible solutions, some people insist to raise the price of petrol used by vehicles. In this essay I am going to discuss pros and cons of this point and give example of alternative solutions.
To begin with, I want o emphasize the negative effects of rising of the cost of the petrol. First of all, results can damage the economy of most countries, what I mean is that petrol is not only utilized by cars, but it is also considered as an essential raw material in the production process of different items such as perfume, wheel etc. Furthermore, increase in the price of petrol will not lead to reducing the use of vehicles, in contrast, it can make our lives much harder than we expect. For instance, people who have financial opportunity to consume petrol will again use their cars, so it will not be honest situation for the poorer people.
Therefore, in my opinion other possible methods still exist. For example, to wide ways, to be more precise, reconstruct the main roads of country or replace the frequently used factories to suitable areas. Moreover, when it comes to reducing the pollution, it is possible to exclude petrol completely and replace it with possible liquids. For instance, nowadays in many countries such as Brazil, Japan scientists have found out harmless technology for the cars which is important for reducing the pollution.
To sum it up, taking into account all the mentioned facts above I think we must try different ways in order to protect the environment.
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Sentence: Nowadays increasing number of traffic congestion and its negative effects are one of the indispensable issues, thus governments endeavor to reduce traffic problems and the level of pollution made by them.
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so it will not be honest situation for the poorer people.
so it will not be an honest situation for the poorer people.
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