Students of a university have a long break between university semesters; the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
1. Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study (For example, a student majoring in engineering may take course in fine arts or social science.)
2. Students must volunteer to work in the university’s city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town. (For example, students may help local primary school children with their homework.) Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university? Why? Give detailed examples and reasons. Use your OWN words, do NOT use memorized examples.
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that education has played a paramount role in the people’s life in the societies. All universities attempt to provide an appropriate condition for flourishing students in all facet of their life. Not all people concur when this issue arises. To being cognizant to the logic behind those who repudiate or endorse the legitimacy of this contention, not having any biased perception, I presume that doing some community works in their city is better than taking an extra and irrelevant course in another faculty for optimal using of students’ leisure times during the break. Among a plentitude of reason in support of this assertion, acquiring many experiences and broadening their horizon could be picked out for further analysis.
To commence with, a consensus has yet to be reached; however, regarding the importance of the experience for paving the way toward the success, based upon the statistics of different general questionnaires in sundry countries, people are unanimous about the conviction that student should utilize their knowledge in practice by doing some jobs besides their educations. This activity gives them the opportunity for executing the knowledge in the real life and being familiar with its up and downs. Furthermore, these experiences stimulate them for working hard; moreover, they could fortify their resumes and increase their chances for finding better jobs in the future. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above. In 2013, Rice University required the medical students to go to some distant places in the rural places and gave people some treatments for their illness and diseases. This activity was very helpful for students and people and increase the penchants of the students to work in this kindness places for future.
In addition to the reason raised above; broadening students’ horizon for the better connection with the society in the future could also substantiate the justifiability of the claim made at the outset of this essay. In conjunction with public belief, a suitable communication ability helps students to mix better with the society and it gives them the opportunity for finding a better position and the success. To delineate, students could be familiar with different people with different cultures and behaviors. Indeed, they learn how to behave properly in the future with different people in different position and linked to the whole society. For instance, when students doing some community activities with municipal for improvement one aspect of the city, they should connect with others for acquiring information and this helps them to improve their social skills. As we know, social skill in compulsory for everyone in the future for peaceful connection with other and stepping stone for the future success.
To drawing the reasons, discreetly put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic is concerned, I reiterate that doing some volunteer activities in the city is more beneficial than passing a irrelevant course in the spur time of the university. This option not only does increase their experiences but also broadening their horizon in the society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Line 4, column 353, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...roadening their horizon in the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2705.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25242718447 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81986676995 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508737864078 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 855.9 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.4712918305 48.9658058833 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.368421053 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1052631579 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257904147269 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815769384467 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653298721166 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154763588723 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735579752292 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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