Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship, because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate with them more often. What do you think?
Relationship with other people is as important as, if not more important, than Oxygen for human in the world. All of us live in society and relationship with others is inherent in our society. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether people should keep away from others to improve their relationship or they should permanently stay with others to have a good relationship. Certainly, some people if asked would agree with the statement that being away from people is better way to foster relationships while others would mention that question depend on great deal of factors; for example, somebody would prefer to stay with others always compared to keep away from them to have a better relationship. As far as I’m concerned, I adopt a firm position that being away from people is not good idea and we should always stay with others to have a best relationship particularly if we are extroversion. In what follows I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
First of all, it is important to consider if we keep away for other people, we will not realize all of their needs and feelings which are very important things for improving the relationship. Certainly, some people think improper relationship would ensue from permanent connection. However, in most cases when people stay with others without any distance and communicate always with them, they are aware of their feelings and their needs that help them out to foster their relationship. To illustrate that issue let’s consider the following example. I remember my friend when started his job in a factory, for having better relationship, decided on being away from other employees to have better relationship. But after a while, due to devoid of any communication and good relationship with others, was fired from a good job. Similarly, I can recollect my brother that because of his permanent communication with other people, has always been aware of all events in his workplace and other employees’ feelings entirely that help him to have a hood relationship with others. As you can see, when you stay with other people constantly, you are successful to have a decent relationship with them.
Another significant point to be mentioned is that people with constant connection and communication have much more chance to resolve their problems when they are involved with some difficult situations or predicaments and dilemmas. Of course, for some people in some situation, there are a lot of ways to resolve problems without permanent connection with other people. However, it would be fair to say that for most people having the constant connection with other people is kind of blessing to resolve their problems because they have a good chance to communicate with various people and tell them their problem and doubtlessly there are some people to help. These situations certainly improve relationship between people. For instance, my brother, Ali, due to permanent connections and communications with his friends and employees, is successful in facing every problem. He could borrow money from his friends when needs fund, could resolve his problems in every substitutions or organizations because of this connections. Therefore, people who stay always with others have more chances to deal with difficult situation and problems with the help of other people.
Finally, it is obvious that people who have the constant connection and permanent communication, definitely could experience more situations and deal with more people than people who are away from others. I’ll be first to admit that maybe these experiences not to be useful and effective for all people. Despite this possibility, when people experience much more situation and involve with much more people, their point of view will certainly expand and they could learn how they could confront with different people and various situations. By way of example, the same brother, Ali, at fifty can easily distinguish, bad and good people in his trade due to long closeness and connection to different people. I think this is the case for other people as well. In fact, I believe useful and effective experience in knowledge of different people and situations will ensue from permanent connection with other people.
By way of conclusion, based on the argument explored above, I am of the opinion that in most case people who stay constantly with others, have good relationship in their life. All aforementioned reasons point to my idea. However, an important issue that must be mentioned is that this cannot be used as a general prescription and some counterexamples might exist. As a result, I suggest conducting more surveys and studies to answer this question more precisely.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 885, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
... should always stay with others to have a best relationship particularly if we ar...
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Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'communicate'.
Suggestion: always communicate
...ay with others without any distance and communicate always with them, they are aware of their feel...
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Line 5, column 1010, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...bstitutions or organizations because of this connections. Therefore, people who stay...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, regarding, similarly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, kind of, of course, as a result, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 115.0 52.1666666667 220% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 27.0 8.0752688172 334% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4030.0 1977.66487455 204% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 778.0 407.700716846 191% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17994858612 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.28134938836 4.48103885553 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89451136125 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.375321336761 0.524837075471 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1230.3 618.680645161 199% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.7223371648 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.0 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0967741935 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25806451613 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8709677419 202% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.499756381656 0.236089414692 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150671382246 0.076458572812 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111105538771 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.309108440343 0.150856017488 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.158943452629 0.0645574589148 246% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 86.8835125448 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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