It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disargee?
Some people argue that it is more essential for children to study their own country rather than the history of the world. I tend to disargee with opinion, because I think teaching both national and world history are equally important.
On the one hand, studying history of nation or region is more necessary for young children. Firstly, having knowledge about the past of country, that make childrend feel proud of a place where they were born and grown up. For instance, through the historical lesson at school, student will respect and aprpreciate early generarions who fought and made sacrifice for independent and freedom of the fatherland. Secondly, studying historical nation helps young children have an obvious and deeper understanding about the events which happened in the past, besides creating motiveted to carry on traditional cuture of the country.
On the other hand, schoolchildren are taught about world history that is also vital part. Because, at the present, globalization trend demands students have some basic knowledge about variety of ethnic groups and different culture. Preparing these information, young children will easily understand about the origin and development in the past of ethic nations. Another important factors is that studying world history provides students with an overview of relationship of nations . For example for this statement, schoollchildren will understand when and why countries signed Paris Peace Accords and how it had an effect on citizens.
To sum up, for the reasons I have mention above, it is equally essential for young generations to study local and world history.
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also, besides, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37890625 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77183215412 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1567916625 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.75 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244738519526 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0938626916165 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605250749315 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160749835566 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413190241062 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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