For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In order to become a successful person in future, one should gain many skills during childhood and youth. One of the most attractive and external features of success is the success in job. Like other aspects, one should gain many experiences and skills in order to thrive in this field. There are two main categories that most of the people think may lead into a successful job in the future: Having strong public relations and studying hard. It may seem crystal clear up to now, but the question is that which of these is more important? In my opinion it is always more important to have a good social relations background rather than studying hard in school. I will vindicate my standpoint in the following article.
First, having successful connections with the people around can mainly broaden one's perspective toward the world. One can meet different people, have conversations, share ideas, and more important take feedbacks. Feedbacks can help an individual evaluate his thoughts and ideas from other people's viewpoints. And in this way, when he participates in any kind of job in the future, he can improve your ideas through analyzing them from different aspects.
Second, by connecting with people of diverse types with different inclinations one can gradually become better in social interactions. And this way one can gradually learn how to communicate with people who are not necessarily have much in common to share. This can improve one's sense of understanding toward customers in the future. Imagine a teenager who goes to social events frequently and connects with people easily. After a couple of years this teenager becomes an adult and gets a job in a restaurant as a waiter. One day an angry customer comes in and starts shouting, complaining about the low quality of the food at the restaurant. In this critical moment the young man with communication skills can easily make the angry man calm down and solve the problem in a peaceful manner.
Last but not least, recent researches conducted in the last two decades around this topic showed that people with higher social and communicational skills have more developed brains in comparisons with those who rarely communicate with others. Also the research defined that people with enhanced communications are able to handle critical situations better. Teenagers have more receptive minds in comparison with adults and this fully illustrates the significance of relating with people especially for young children under the age of eighteen.
To wrap it up, if we want to witness a successful upcoming generation, we should encourage people and authorities to also focus on communicational skills for children rather than just persuading them to study hard in schools.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2302.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13839285714 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82182058194 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546875 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0112933487 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.636363636 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3636363636 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.77272727273 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182200843901 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590979893797 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631985848316 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11396597367 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654875562428 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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