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There has been some debate among weather the vessels excavated in Iraq used as batteries or not. The lecturer says that the vessels were used as batteries. However, the author of the reading argues that the vessels were not actually used as batteries in the ancient time and enumerates three reasons of support.
The first point of dispute is the absence of the wires. The lecture argues that the vessels were discovered by local people, which mean that there may be other materials found with the vessels but the people consider that materials less important. So the wires may be discovered but , thrown away, or the local people may be un interested in them. However, the reading contraindicate this point saying that if the vessels were used as batteries they will need wires to conduct the electricity.
Another controversial issue, is that the copper cylinder look the same as the copper cylinder discovered in the ruins of the Seleucia. The professor said that in the ancient time the cylinders were used to hold scrolls, but by time the cylinder purpose were changed to be used as a batteries. According to the professor, the cylinders could be used as batteries by gathering liquid and some clays, that was how the ancient used them as batteries. On the other hand, the author of the reading refutes this point by saying that the cylinders were used to hold scrolls in the Seleucia.
The final point of dispute is that there was no need for electricity in the ancient time . The professor argues that the batteries in the ancient time were causing mild shock or tingling sensation, and some people were used this as a magical power to convince others. Second, in ancient time some doctors were used batteries for healing and relieve pain. But, the reading argues that in ancient time there was no devises rely on electricity so there was no need for the batteries.
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The correct topic should be:
The correct topic should be: 'TPO 25', not 'too 25'
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...and enumerates three reasons of support. The first point of dispute is the absen...
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... The first point of dispute is the absence of the wires. The lecture ar...
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...tant. So the wires may be discovered but , thrown away, or the local people may be...
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...eed wires to conduct the electricity. Another controversial issue, is that the...
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...crolls, but by time the cylinder purpose were changed to be used as a batteries. ...
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...der purpose were changed to be used as a batteries. According to the professor, the cylind...
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... cylinders could be used as batteries by gathering liquid and some clays, that wa...
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...used to hold scrolls in the Seleucia. The final point of dispute is that there...
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...need for electricity in the ancient time . The professor argues that the batteries...
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...convince others. Second, in ancient time some doctors were used batteries for hea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 10.4613686534 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1599.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 332.0 270.72406181 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81626506024 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49959837571 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.403614457831 0.540411800872 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 487.8 419.366225166 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8992352683 49.2860985944 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.214285714 110.228320801 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7142857143 21.698381199 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35714285714 7.06452816374 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.3589403974 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.2367328918 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.42419426049 88% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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