Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities
It is undeniable that helping the community is a popular topic which has caused heated debate in a long period of time because it affects everybody in his or her daily lives. Depending on personal experience, personality type, and emotional concern, people differ greatly in their attitudes toward this issue. As far as I am concerned, I agree with this statement that young people spend fewer time to helping their communities. In the following paragraphs, I will try to explain the specific reasons which I think are the most common viewpoints nowadays.
To begin with, one of the compelling reasons that justifies my opinion is that the world has faced with significant changes which influence young people the most because young people pay much attention to those changes. One of these changes is arriving new technologies such as smart phones, tablets, to name but a few. Young people busy all the time with these facilities so that they do not aware of what is changing in their surroundings. For example, my brother is twenty years old and he barley moves form his spot because he is busy with his smart phone all the time. So I think we should not expect such people to helping their communities.
Another equally notable point supporting my opinion is that the norms in our society have been changed. Young people prefer to take care of their business rather than being involved in the community activities. In other words, helping each other do not account a valuable behavior any more. For instance, my friend has a theory of his own which in these times everybody should focus on his or her own problems instead of giving help to each other. Thus, I think, as times pass, people's contact with each other will decrease because of their values and norms.
To sum up, by taking into account all the above factors, we may reach the conclusion that young people spend fewer time to helping their communities due to their busying with their smart phones and changing the norms of the society.
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Suggestion: period
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Suggestion:
...ease because of their values and norms. To sum up, by taking into account all th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, thus, for example, for instance, i think, such as, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1659.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80869565217 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47663138226 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544927536232 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.457420328 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.6 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370903558327 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126688032755 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926097330782 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246226213632 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246025062739 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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