Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’ s development.
In the modern era, electronic devices have profound effects on daily life in every society. There are various needs that can be solved with technology better than without it. The Majority of people spend a lot of time on working with personal computers and smartphones. there is the controversial question whether we must let our children use these devices much like us or not. I personally believe that children can prosper by using these devices. I pinpoint my reasons in following paragraphs.
The computer video games have the notable impacts on children. In these days, children can learn during computer games better than classrooms. they concentrate on the game well. Consequently, they have fun and learn moral point in the game. As statistics, children cannot listen to their teacher more than 30 minutes, although they can play several hours a day. In addition, statistics demonstrate that the children that can play appropriate video games can progress conspicuously in the future.
communication gets easier with technology. children can use their smartphones to communicate with each other easily. Communication has a significant effect on the progressing of their brains. It is worth to note that they can speak about various topics with their friends who have various personalities. As a research study was done by researchers at the Sharif University of Technology showed that children that have more communication than others tolerate other ideas, so they have more relationships and friends. Finally, others respect them more.
The last reason is that new learning methods need technology. Children can learn their lessons by novel methods and tools better than classical methods. As an example, my son used its smartphones to memorize the color names.
to short the long story, I believe that using technology help children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, if, so, well, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 293.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30716723549 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86264108378 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59385665529 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9695397709 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.6818181818 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3181818182 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.18181818182 5.45110844103 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197003941097 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622056026086 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425151982768 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103139469417 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462845076954 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.63 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.