TPO 26- integrated
As it was stated in the reading passage, it is the author’s belief that zebra mussel's invasion cannot be stopped and it poses a serious threat to freshwater fish populations. And he provided three reasons to substantiate his claim. On the contrary the lecturer finds the justification of the author unconvincing and utterly repudiates the claim by providing some counter arguments.
Initially the writer brought up the idea that the history of these animals suggests that their invasion might be unstoppable. However, the lecturer is thoroughly doubtful about the reliability of this idea. As he points out that they might have been unstoppable in the past but there are ways to stop them now. He continues that the ships can refill the ballast water with ocean water. Because the mussels cannot live in salt water. Another emphasized point in the reading was that the mussels can dominate their new habitat. On the other hand the lecturer refutes this one too by asserting that the author's statement may be true at the beginning. But once the birds get used to their existence in the area, they can consume them for food and these mussels are a very good food source for birds. So it's not like that they don't have any predators.
As the last point, the author drew attention to the fact that the mussels are likely to cause a decline in overall fish population in habitats where they become dominant. Yet again, the lecturer considers this idea invalid as well by pointing out that the mussels can have a negative impact on plankton eating fish while, they can have a positive impact on the bottom eating fish population. So the author's general statement about fish population decrease cannot be true overall.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 386, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ill the ballast water with ocean water. Because the mussels cannot live in salt water. ...
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Line 2, column 600, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...utes this one too by asserting that the authors statement may be true at the beginning....
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 822, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ce for birds. So its not like that they dont have any predators. As the last point,...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, well, while, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 22.412803532 147% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 292.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8904109589 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55424357789 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 145.348785872 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561643835616 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.83100329 49.2860985944 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4666666667 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.93333333333 7.06452816374 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35106234168 0.272083759551 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109234958043 0.0996497079465 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748395410488 0.0662205650399 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219576383503 0.162205337803 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617051769615 0.0443174109184 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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