30/10/2017
Some people think that higher salary is important when choosing a company to work for, while others think that good atmosphere at a workplace is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion with relevant examples.
Many aver being paid a big salary should be the main criterion for choosing a workplace while others claim having a pleasant atmosphere at an office is more crucial. Below both prospects will be analyzed and author’s opinion will be given.
On the one hand, picking a job position with a higher pay is a reasonable idea. Firstly, the size of a bank account is often seen as a measurement of a personal success and the amount of money earned per year has a correlation with a social status: the higher salary is, the higher social position the individual occupies. Secondly, today’s standards of living depend on the person’s income. So, by choosing bigger income, an employee creates better living conditions for his beloved sons, daughters and spouse. In other words, taking into consideration a size of a wage is a right thing to do because it correlates with a position in social hierarchy and well-being of dependants.
On the other hand, those who pay attention to the atmosphere at a workplace have their arguments. Primarily, many psychological studies demonstrate the connection between a friendly and joyful atmosphere in an office and a feeling of happiness and satisfaction of those who labor there with their lives. Furthermore, the same research showcases the correlation between the productivity of workers and their perception of working experiences. Shortly, a positive perception of a job leads to a dramatic increase in the volume of work done. The possible explanation to this founding was given by the researchers who believed the feeling of being a part of a large team whose members shares the same goals encourages people to collaborate with one another. Thus, it is safe to say working at a place with a decent atmosphere has some advantages.
In my opinion, although each prospect has its strong facets and weaknesses, I am personally prone to think choosing a job with a beneficial atmosphere is more reasonable because people spend a huge proportion of their adult life working. So, if a job provides folks with pleasant feelings, it is a better choice.
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Essay evaluation report
being paid a big salary
being paid with a big salary, or
paying a big salary
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same words/sentences styles, look:
has a correlation with...
because it correlates with...
demonstrate the connection between a friendly and joyful atmosphere in an office and a feeling of happiness...
the same research showcases the correlation between ...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 348 350
No. of Characters: 1697 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.319 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.876 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.89 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.134 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.523 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.052 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1759.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05459770115 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02809078393 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563218390805 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8062055494 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.266666667 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220643979522 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664128964016 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503705992623 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127539070733 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256459159493 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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