tpo46
The reading passage explains that the electronic collecting and managing of the data base of medical reportes of the patients have a lot of benefits, against the traditional way ,which compile and store them on paper form. However, the lecture disagees with this view and gives some spacial reason to reject this claim.
firstly, the speaker says that the advantages of the storing and transforming of the electronic way is over stated and, the handwriting is also usual in the hospital and clinics . Because the lligal restriction ,the doctors have to record all informations of the patients by the handwriting and storage them at the safe places. And on the other hand they must record them for the future backups at the emergency situation. Also, the cost is not a very remarkable problem beacase when the doctors must recoed the history at the traditional ways for legal reasons it is not additional cost for the system.
the lecturer also does not convinced that the electronical way will prevent any kind of the errors. She discribes that as the doctors are not adopted by the new technology and also they must write the medical information by the hand writng,so , the stufs must add the medicals records to the system and because of the bias of humanity that makes it possible that this system have a lot of redecolous information.
Finally the lecture refutes the reading' s claims about the improvement of the reaser by the accessablity of the patients information to the reasercher. furethemore the speaker claims that it is not feasible and it is not real facts. Because at the united state the people are coveredby the privacy low and nowwhere can not releas this information freely. the reaserture needs to gives the permissiion which it is complicated proccess and it is not garantied.
At the end the spraker says that this claims at the reading passage are absolutly abstractive and have no any relation to the concreate.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...of benefits, against the traditional way ,which compile and store them on paper fo...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Firstly
...spacial reason to reject this claim. firstly, the speaker says that the advantages o...
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Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s also usual in the hospital and clinics . Because the lligal restriction ,the doc...
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Line 3, column 211, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...clinics . Because the lligal restriction ,the doctors have to record all informati...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... not additional cost for the system. the lecturer also does not convinced that t...
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Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'convince'
Suggestion: convince
...e system. the lecturer also does not convinced that the electronical way will prevent ...
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Line 5, column 240, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
...e medical information by the hand writng,so , the stufs must add the medicals recor...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...ve a lot of redecolous information. Finally the lecture refutes the reading s claim...
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Line 7, column 113, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...f the reaser by the accessablity of the patients information to the reasercher. furethem...
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Line 7, column 153, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furethemore
...patients information to the reasercher. furethemore the speaker claims that it is not feasi...
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Line 7, column 323, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dby the privacy low and nowwhere can not releas this information freely. the reas...
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Line 7, column 357, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...an not releas this information freely. the reaserture needs to gives the permissii...
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Line 7, column 381, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'give'.
Suggestion: give
...rmation freely. the reaserture needs to gives the permissiion which it is complicated...
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Line 8, column 104, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...sage are absolutly abstractive and have no any relation to the concreate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, so, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 328.0 270.72406181 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92987804878 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72157823008 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503048780488 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 505.8 419.366225166 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9281889911 49.2860985944 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.384615385 110.228320801 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2307692308 21.698381199 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 7.06452816374 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 4.19205298013 334% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294602407791 0.272083759551 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881496614855 0.0996497079465 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728115175036 0.0662205650399 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144938812948 0.162205337803 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0818846453345 0.0443174109184 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.3589403974 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 63.6247240618 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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