Many young people nowadays are imitating celebrities in sports and movies. In your opinion, is this good or bad? Support your point of view with reasons and examples from your own experience.
In this day and age, celebrities in movies and sport have become a pattern for many young people. Although this model of imitating regarded as thoroughly constructive and positive for young people's life by a considerable number of people, there are many people with opposing viewpoint. For the purpose of this essay, I would discuss how far I disagree with this copying.
To begin with, there are various reasons to the opposition with imitating celebrities. At first copy of famous individuals' life such as DaVinci or Edison that are known as hard-working, can lead young people to right way in their living. But the artists or sportsmen's life is full of luxury and modality, this bad habits just are their studies for our children. For example, In the society, I see many young persons influenced by their dress, walking style, and makeup.
In addition, their future will be prosperous, those youth that follow the lifestyle of elders like Edison. But what profit is with following a movie character for us. For instance, the name of a scientist like Farabi remains forever, while many of movie stars or sports celebrities died in lonely and poverty far years after their fame.
In conclusion, in my opinion, although following famous people's life is beneficial drawbacks in imitating stars in movie and sport are far from their benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 6.10837438424 49% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 8.36945812808 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 5.94088669951 34% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 20.9802955665 95% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 31.9359605911 103% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.75862068966 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1120.0 1207.87684729 93% => OK
No of words: 224.0 242.827586207 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.00649968141 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.92707691288 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6489884236 2.71678728327 98% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 139.433497537 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598214285714 0.580463131201 103% => OK
syllable_count: 349.2 379.143842365 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.931034482759 322% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.65517241379 192% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.5024630542 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5917389353 50.4703680194 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.818181818 104.977214359 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3636363636 20.9669160288 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8181818182 7.25397266985 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.33497536946 131% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 6.9802955665 57% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198991153722 0.242375264174 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821860776338 0.0925447433944 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513312159499 0.071462118173 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12503879055 0.151781067708 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515634074838 0.0609392437508 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 12.6369458128 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.1260098522 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.9458128079 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 11.5310837438 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.32886699507 110% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 55.0591133005 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.94827586207 116% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.3980295567 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 72.0 Out of 90
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