Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
The world events have an influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is vitally important to follow them and stay updated with them in order for the best results to follow suits as they provide us with myriad merits that assist us to guide our nation toward progress. Therefore, I reckon that knowing about the world events is essential in both terms of improving the communication skills and enhance the education level.
To begin with, it is critical to sharpen our social abilities through interacting and communicating with a wide range of people from diverse spheres because they are deemed the ideal way to perfect the social skills a lot. Indeed, learning about the basic history of people and their events will provide the absolute necessity of a productive communication with them because we will be able to know how they think, speak and socialize. For instance, three years ago,I watched and read about a special celebrating day of the united states and after one year I travelled to one of its states and I did not find any difficulty during my journey as I learned from that event, how they deal with each other, the handy tips of their lives, so, I could cooperate efficiently and collaborate effectively with them, thus, such a collaborative environment enhance my interpersonal relationships immensely which had a positive impact on my future workflow and productivity. In contrast, those who used to be isolated and do not attract to enrich their mind with the world news, they will suffer a lot because they lack such a skill and that has a bad impact on their future work outcome. Consequently, to have professional skills we must eagerly seek to carve out a vast array of knowledge about d a verity of people.
Second, people should surge their children to be up to date with the world scientific conferences from an early age due to its benefits in establishing the solid foundation of learning which is considered the lighting guide to fulfill the young generation goals. For example, my father used to encouraged me to attend all the scientific events and that what aided me to broaden my horizon and improve my intellectual ability which, in turn, endowed me with a basic and fundamental information that I really need to be familiar with as they were the ideal guide for me to achieve my dreams, on the other hand, those who are isolated and do not like to be involved in such as these places they will be more vulnerable to obstacles because they will have limited information. In conclusion, parents should advocate their kids to immerse in all the scientific and beneficial events because this will enhance their study career.
To sum up, it is crucial to pay attention to what will happen around the world in order to widen our perspective and thrive easily in the community.
- Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 71
- technology and art and science 76
- extended family 73
- space exploration or space travel 73
- it is important to keep your old friends than to make new friends 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
...socialize. For instance, three years ago,I watched and read about a special celebr...
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Line 3, column 580, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and after one year I travelled to one of its states and I did not find any diffic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, really, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i reckon, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, such as, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2344.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82304526749 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72627766065 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526748971193 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 745.2 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.1344086022 199% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 136.071340562 48.9658058833 278% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 195.333333333 100.406767564 195% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.5 20.6045352989 197% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.0833333333 5.45110844103 277% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229451647677 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901728783476 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403229580571 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146523755967 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332463757979 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.5 11.7677419355 183% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.34 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.1575268817 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.0537634409 179% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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