TPO-34 Integrated essay
Reading and lecture talks about causes of extinction of sea cows in siberia. Reading states three main
causes of depletion of its population. But lecture is not convinvced by these reasons.
Firstly, reading states that one of the significant factor for extenction of sea cows is excessive hunting by
human, as they are main food supply in case of extreme environment. On contrary professor cast doubt on this
statement, he said population of siberia during that time was not large enough to destruct whole habitat of sea
cow. Moreover, it is fact that these sea cows are were giant and weigh very heavy so over hunting is not possible.
Secondly, reading mention that destruction of sea cows population due lack of availability of kelps on which sea
cows have survived. In addition, destruction of kelps leads to severe reduction in number of sea cows. However,
professor denies this, distruption of ecocystem certainly can damage other marine species. For instance, may
interrupt habitat of whales, but report do not show such evidence. As a result, kelps number were
increasing rather than decreasing, so food was available for sea cows.
Thirdly, reading points out that devastation of sea cows habitat can be due to increased import and export by European.
But professor refutes that by saying that when European population arrived there were few sea cows. In addition, he thinks that growth of sea cows were diminished many years before last European visited. Therefore, professor claims that there should be another predominant reason for extinction of this sea cows species.
In conclusion, professor sucessfully casts doubt against reasons mentioned in the reading passage for the complete
loss of sea cows species
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... in the reading passage for the complete loss of sea cows species
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 5.01324503311 399% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1477.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 279.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29390681004 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70033568244 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569892473118 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9847857921 49.2860985944 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3125 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4375 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4375 7.06452816374 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 15.0 4.09492273731 366% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.443926821484 0.272083759551 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15570838134 0.0996497079465 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0886788517007 0.0662205650399 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158687399559 0.162205337803 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.095737726778 0.0443174109184 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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