The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourists facilities.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourists facilities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by yahya976 on Thu, 03/01/2018 - 10:16

The given maps illustrate how reconstruction happens to add some amenities to attract the tourists.
Overall, the island witnessed a big development in the infrastructure such as restaurants and accommodation area. However, the borders of the island still the same.
In the first map, it shows some trees in the east and west of the island. Furthermore, the sea surrounds all directions. Moreover, the beach is located in the east.
Turning to the second map, it has a big advancement. The restaurant is added in the north of the island to cook delicious meals for tourists. Furthermore, the accommodation area is established in the east of island near the beach. In addition, the surrounding of reception is booked for vehicle tracks. However, the footpath is situated between building in the accommodation area. Also, the two tents are built in the south of the island. While the form of surroundings still has the same shape.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 439, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s are built in the south of the island. While the form of surroundings still has the ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, moreover, second, so, still, while, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 778.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 154.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05194805195 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11257819593 2.65546596893 117% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 106.607317073 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558441558442 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 230.4 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.33902439024 230% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 22.4926829268 49% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.1046981505 43.030603864 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 59.8461538462 112.824112599 53% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.8461538462 22.9334400587 52% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.09268292683 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123319655765 0.215688989381 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437187535712 0.103423049105 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505936701155 0.0843802449381 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0775239483492 0.15604864568 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197029701852 0.0819641961636 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 61.2550243902 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.12 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.4329268293 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.9970731707 58% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 6.0 11.0658536585 54% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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