"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
The above argument construes that in order to be in the zenith with the business, it is crucial and mandatory to hire the executives who sleep less than 6 hours. The author put forwarded the strong conclusion based on the feeble and unwarranted assumptions. These assumptions plunge the authenticity and pertinent of the argument to very extreme.
Firstly, In spite of figuring out the valid cause of the event, the exhaustive search must be laid on the other possible causes for such events. Only, then the construe might be valid, else it embellishes the overt fallacies in their body .The author, interpreted that, the curtaining sleep is the cardinal source for the high profit for the company. But, that’s not valid in most of the cases. That could be mere coincidence rather than the pivotal cause. It may be the potential and technical stuffs, the executives possess, bolstered the economic status of the company. Additionally, it might be the company’s perks that instigated their passion and guide them to ameliorate the economic status of the company. The argument would be flawless if the author provides some data that could refute the claims on perks and the intrinsic potential.
Monotonously, inconsistent statistical data are byzantine and highly suspicious. The author asserted the ratings are provided by 300 male and female executives. These mere numerical values are the cardinal cause for the dubiousness. The ratings by mere 300 never represents, raft executives in the organization. The 300 male and female may represent 3% of the total executives. Judging the entire community based on the sparse data is hell lot of absurd. The author’s claim would be bolted if data about the total executives are available. These insufficiency overt it’s logical flaw for granted without sedulous effort.
Lastly, strong evidences are the backbone for the strong conclusion. The Vague tone plummet the clarity of the argument to the greater extent. The author claimed about the high profit and success throughout the argument. But, the clarity and the outcomes of the success and the profits are obscured. Mathematics, in rare cases, holds exception. Literally speaking, 1.9999 >1.888, say, the profit used to be was 1.888, now it is 1.9999, for sure, it is increased, but the significant increase is questionable here.
The argument would be bolted if author provides delineate statistical data about the higher profit.
The above clearly delineates why, the argument is flawed. Besides, the mitigation and suggestion to strengthen the argument is also depicted lucidly.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 2107 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.089 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.689 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.934 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.261 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.304 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 156, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ible causes for such events. Only, then the construe might be valid, else it embellishes the...
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Line 2, column 238, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...lishes the overt fallacies in their body .The author, interpreted that, the curtai...
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Line 2, column 240, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...shes the overt fallacies in their body .The author, interpreted that, the curtainin...
^^^
Line 2, column 658, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...os;s perks that instigated their passion and guide them to ameliorate the economi...
^^^
Line 3, column 545, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this insufficiency' or 'These insufficiencies'?
Suggestion: This insufficiency; These insufficiencies
...out the total executives are available. These insufficiency overt it's logical flaw for grante...
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Line 7, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the argument is also depicted lucidly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, so, then, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2199.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3115942029 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86329301183 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 19.0 8.76447105788 217% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.7648108781 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4444444444 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 23.324526521 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.74074074074 5.70786347227 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110239324338 0.218282227539 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0322954573734 0.0743258471296 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451117712667 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0485999788451 0.128457276422 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512443043038 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.3550499002 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 98.500998004 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.