The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to
evaluate the recommendation.
The Board of Directors of Monarch Books claimed that Monarch should open a café in in its store to attract more customers. However, some questions need answers to evaluate the claim.
When opening a café, a space need to be made. The recommendation said that the space can be made by discounting the children’s book section. However, what does the profit from children’s books account for the portion of the total income of Monarch Books? Although Monarch Books is known for its wide selection of books, the children’s books could be the main products it sells. To answers the question, the directors should present a pie chart that can show the portions of total income.
Even if the profit from children’s book sales does not account for a large part of total income, the children’s book section could also have a large effect on the selling of other book section. For example, when parents bring their children to Monarch Books, parents could also browse the recent best-selling books. People are likely to buy the books when those books are most welcome to the public. Those best-selling books often have large income.
One of the adversary of Monarch, Regal Books, recently opened its own café. Therefore, the directors concluded that opening a café in Monarch could better compete with Regal Books. The question here is that what is the similar parts and the different parts between two book stores? For example, if both book stores are at the same location, then the customers they attract are more likely the same. With an opening café, customer would like to go to the book store to read books with a cup of coffee. In contrast, when two books stores are at different locations, assuming that Monarch is in a center location of the city with other café beside it and Regal is in the county with no other café around it, then Monarch may not attract more customers with a café opening. Monarch would more like people to buy books to other café for reading.
To evaluate the argument, the directors should provide answers to the questions mentioned above.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not on the right track.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1666 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.68 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.278 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.737 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.273 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.368 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.558 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 81, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: in
...claimed that Monarch should open a café in in its store to attract more customers. Ho...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, for example, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 356.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93539325843 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57898060373 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443820224719 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 515.7 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.0766628194 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4736842105 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7368421053 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424757568514 0.218282227539 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142417782895 0.0743258471296 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0962520380586 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202410558471 0.128457276422 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0874130758553 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.3550499002 145% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.197005988 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.9071856287 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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