"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population
increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents
involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number
of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day
during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the
50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the
neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on
moped rentals."
The given argument is initiated with the claim that number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians can be decreased by limiting the number of mopeds rented by the island’s moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day in summer season. The argument has cited the example of neighbouring island Seaville, which proposes that the limiting number of rentals decreased the moped accidents last year. However, the argument put forward by the writer is inconsistent and unconvincing in several aspects. It is based on some unwarranted and dubious analogies.
The assumption that number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians can be decreased by limiting the number of mopeds rented by the islands’s moped rental companies . The statement put forward by the writer is completely illogical because occurring an accident depends on many factors such as low maintenance of traffic, pedestrian not taking the proper traffic route, moped driver may not have necessary driving license or most often or occasionally the situation of a drunk driver. It would be fallacious to assume that accident may decrease from 50 per day to 25 per day in summer season. The writer could have strengthen its argument if it was proposed with a fleeting reference using graphs or statistics. Thus it sounds impausible due to lack of solid evidence in its support.
Finally, another glaring loophole in the argument is that the writer cites the example of neighbouring island Seaville, where the number of accidents were limited by limiting the number of rentals due to the enforcement of such limits on moped rentals. This statement is the weakest of all as there is no data given about survey done in that area. If the survey is done than in which part of the city is done, which age group were considered for the survey, time and other necessary elements. The analogy fails to strengthen the board’s argument.
Therefore taking into account all these logical fallacies, it can be said that the writer’s argument is flawed and unconvincing. The writer would need to provide sounder arguments and better analogies to justify its proposal.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
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argument 1 -- not exactly
argument 2 -- not OK. In GRE, we have to accept all data or evidence are true. It is important to find out loopholes behind surveys or studies. Loopholes mean that we accept all surveys told are true, but there are some conditions applied, for example:
It works for time A (10 years ago), but it doesn't mean it works for time B (nowadays).
It works for location A (a city, community, nation), but it doesn't mean it works for location B (another city, community, nation).
It works for people A (a manager), but it doesn't mean it works for people B (a worker).
It works for event A (one event, project... ), but it doesn't mean it works for event B (another event, project...).
It works for A and B, but not C.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 350 350
No. of Characters: 1751 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.325 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.003 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.669 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.031 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.056 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 175, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...he islands's moped rental companies . The statement put forward by the writer...
^^
Line 3, column 625, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'strengthened'.
Suggestion: strengthened
...in summer season. The writer could have strengthen its argument if it was proposed with a ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 722, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...g reference using graphs or statistics. Thus it sounds impausible due to lack of sol...
^^^^
Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...writer cites the example of neighbouring island Seaville, where the number of acc...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...rengthen the board's argument. Therefore taking into account all these logical f...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 83, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gical fallacies, it can be said that the writer's argument is flawed and unc...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 350.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17428571429 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84622086395 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502857142857 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.9472703528 57.8364921388 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.733333333 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.06666666667 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187264690714 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628199345888 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911668174743 0.0701772020484 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118523535403 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672255188075 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.