Do you agree or disagree? It is better to travel abroad to visit different countries when you are younger rather than when you are older.
Adventuring is the ultimate aim of various people in the world. To reach their goal, they are faced with many obstacles included financial situation and free time. I believe that best time for traveling abroad is age between 50 to 80 years. I feel this way because of two main reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, during elderly, people are in a proper financial situation. without any doubt, Money is a hinder of many activities in the world. People between the ages of 18 to 24 years old since they are in the way of obtaining university degree have free time to visit their wished countries. However, they are not in a stable situation and their low income would not afford to travel abroad. As a personal example, I have always wished to visit Manchester in Britain. I have a vested interest in this city because of visiting Old Trafford which is the stadium of Manchester United, my favorite football team. I planned for it and even did some evaluation to predict the cost of the trip. The cost is somehow equivalent to the income of two years full-time job. Nevertheless, reaching this goal in the old age is not impossible.
Secondly, at the 50s people have less responsibility. According to the evidence, eighty percent of people in the world have a full-time job. They are not independent and work as an employee. It means that they should shoulder various responsibilities in their workplace. Even if they have their own company, their responsibility about their families and partner are another hindrance. Since older people are retired, they have a fewer task to conduct in their daily activities. Furthermore, youngsters have less spare time since they need to do be updated always. Since we are living in a competitive world, they are obliged to enhance their knowledge to secure their job. As a designer, for instance, searching on the Pinterest is an inseparable part of my routine. It assists me to grasp latest trends of designing. No matter how much effort I put to save money, I cannot neglect my responsibilities to take a week off.
In a nutshell, I firmly believe that ages between ages of 50 to 80 are the most proper time to visit various countries. In these ages, humans have more spare time to devote it for traveling abroad. Furthermore, after retirement, you don’t need to care about your financial situation and responsibilities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 81, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Without
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Line 4, column 784, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'grasp the latest'.
Suggestion: grasp the latest
...le part of my routine. It assists me to grasp latest trends of designing. No matter how much...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1998.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84951456311 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86454249972 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516990291262 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.4919291877 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.0 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2592592593 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2962962963 5.45110844103 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0623651872917 0.236089414692 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0167312122793 0.076458572812 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0258663644319 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0490475617851 0.150856017488 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353436001535 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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