Many people believe that the increased presence of violence in films and television these days is responsible for the rising incidents of violent crimes among youths in society. They argue that governments have a duty to control the media so as to reduce this phenomenon.
Do you agree with this argument?
The surging of youth crimes these days are believed to be started from the violence in movies and TV. Some people claim that governments have to control the appearance of thrilling scenes so as to reduce this phenomenon. I am strongly convinced by this opinion. Throughout the essay, I will clarify the statement and give my own examples.
Kids nowadays spend too much time using TV and other electronic devices. They might watch movies that have rating different from PG. Parents cannot always in charge of banning them from seeing what kinds of shows and thus, children have chances to watch and mimic actions from the films. Moreover, at the age of fifteen or sixteen, teenagers tend to copy movements and conversations from their favorite TV shows and video games. Many of them contain violence and killing scenes and as a result, adolescents may learn from these and apply them to the real world. In video games and TV shows, characters have many ‘lives’ and they cannot be killed easily, but in the reality, we have only life to live, we cannot get a headshot and revive normally without any side-effects.
Authorities should give more attention to this problem. If the governments cut down thrilling scenes, people will not watch it and therefore, the rate of juvenile delinquency will be lulled down. Parental guidance is also a great solution to decelerate the rate of young criminals. Parents should spend times talking to their children about school work or personal life as teenagers are the age where they are really rebellious and they can do anything sounds foolishly.
All things considered, I still hold my view about the given solution. Governments should take care more about scenes on films to alleviate the crime rate at early ages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, therefore, thus, as to, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00675675676 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63182180817 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614864864865 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6267271544 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.625 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165095923661 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493486243319 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631788162021 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101703532282 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682677752073 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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