Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Submitted by nuuuuuuu on Mon, 06/11/2018 - 01:51

Nowadays, we live in an era of globalization and profound technological changes that affected the society in different ways. I strongly believe that for decades, the television is destroying human relationships for two reasons. First, watch television create deep dependency, especially on the youngest. Second, many people prefer to stay at home instead of going out and pass the time with their friends and family.

First and foremost, the act of watching television for long hours create dependency on the people, especially on children and teenagers, it is because they can spend eight or ten hours watching movies, soap operas or series. For instance, a prestigious university in the United States shows that dependency on tv is the root of isolation of reality in children. In this way, this is a big problem in the society, depriving children of healthy communication with the people around them.

Another point to consider relevant in the case of older people is that many of them prefer to spend time in front of the tv instead of talk with their family. For example, some years ago, one member of my family preferred pass time in pajamas, eating popcorn and watching movies instead of talk with their sons or close friends. In this sense, the obsession for watch tv is very dangerous for the mental health of the people and unfortunately break good relationships with our close people.

For these reasons, obsessed and depended behavior of people with the television is the root of destroying relationships and excellent communication with the people around us. Despite the fact that some people believe that it is not a significant social problem, I am of the conviction that it causes a tremendous negative impact on the society. Finally, I would propose that all the parents have the responsibility to be strict with the total of hours that their children must watch tv to care their health and their development as a member of a human group.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 162, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ys. I strongly believe that for decades, the television is destroying human relat...
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Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
... children of healthy communication with the people around them. Another point to consider relevant ...
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Line 7, column 154, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...nships and excellent communication with the people around us. Despite the fact that some people beli...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, so, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99085365854 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81996044363 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518292682927 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.9509737188 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.923076923 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2307692308 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102577518002 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0419046792867 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390157234084 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0706397690738 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254505369257 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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