TOEFL essay: Why go to university?

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Nowadays , getting into a university or a college ...
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...or a college is a desire for most people . Different people have various reasons f...
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...ng into university based on their social , cultural , or even family background . ...
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...versity based on their social , cultural , or even family background . However , a...
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...l , cultural , or even family background . However , as far as I concerned , getti...
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...al , or even family background . However , as far as I concerned , getting into un...
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...ground . However , as far as I concerned , getting into university is necessary fo...
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...or one's future due to some reasons , which I will explore in the following e...
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...ch I will explore in the following essay . To begin with , it is clear that un...
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... the following essay . To begin with , it is clear that university provides us...
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...th wide knowledge about things around us . As a matter of fact , we have deep unde...
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...t things around us . As a matter of fact , we have deep understanding about societ...
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...society thanks to the lessons in classes . This not only broadens our knowledge bu...
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...dens our knowledge but also helps others . More importantly , nowadays , universit...
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...but also helps others . More importantly , nowadays , university is a symbol of hi...
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...lps others . More importantly , nowadays , university is a symbol of high educatio...
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...iversity makes us stand out among others . For instance , it is true that an inter...
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...us stand out among others . For instance , it is true that an international compan...
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...o have at least a Bachelor's degree . In general , universities give us a cha...
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...st a Bachelor's degree . In general , universities give us a chance to broade...
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...ies give us a chance to broaden our mind . In addition , university ensures a d...
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...nce to broaden our mind . In addition , university ensures a decent job for the...
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... students in the future after graduating . As a result of accomplishment a four-ye...
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...sult of accomplishment a four-year study , it is not difficult for students to fin...
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...which help them afford their own livings . Moreover , graduating students also hav...
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...them afford their own livings . Moreover , graduating students also have good envi...
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...onment network place with friendly peers , good bosses , and interesting works tha...
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... place with friendly peers , good bosses , and interesting works thanks to the gra...
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...ing works thanks to the graduated degree . A very good example is my brother ,who ...
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...gree . A very good example is my brother ,who had graduated University of Michigan...
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...orking at Amazon as a research assistant . He can afford his own livings and suppo...
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...supports financial problems in my family . Moreover , his working environment is e...
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...nancial problems in my family . Moreover , his working environment is enjoyable wi...
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...with creative and hard working coworkers . In short , university makes it possible...
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...ve and hard working coworkers . In short , university makes it possible by ensurin...
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...kes it possible by ensuring a decent job . In conclusion , there is no doub...
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...ring a decent job . In conclusion , there is no doubt that university gives...
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... gives us a chance to improve ourshelves .This not only provides wide knowledge b...
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...gives us a chance to improve ourshelves .This not only provides wide knowledge bu...
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...ves us a chance to improve ourshelves .This not only provides wide knowledge but al...
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...nt job for us in the future. As a result , it is clear that everyone must get into...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, at least, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in general, in short, no doubt, as a matter of fact, as a result, it is true, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08333333333 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95677533674 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543209876543 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3680021303 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6842105263 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0526315789 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.52631578947 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 42.0 5.5376344086 758% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137684662424 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493625580814 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405052703017 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0889225726344 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238889066404 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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