Writing integrated - TPO 27
The reading discusses some scientific reasons for happening of the little ice age which was from year 1350 until 1900 E.C. and provides three reasons of support. However, the lecture claims about new information of scientists about the little ice age and refutes each author's reasons.
First, the reading argues that one reason of occurring the ice age is the disruption of the ocean currents. The professor rejects this point by explaining that Gulf Stream just related to Europe North America. It cannot explain the decrease of the temperature in southern hemisphere like Africa and New Zealand.
Second, the article describes that volcanic eruption had caused the dark dust which blocked sun lights to warm Earth. The professor opposes this point by talking about visual effect of volcanic like colorful sunsets which was light. He adds although it is true to be cold air because of the dark cloud, it needs stronger and darker amount of cloud to cold the weather on the time.
Third, the article mentions that the reduction in population caused the decrease of the temperature. The professor refutes this point by saying that it needs too much time to affect. He talks that before the start of the ice age, most trees of the forest had been cut and replacing them by nature takes time. He adds the growth of plants in the forest was not enough to make the global weather cold.
- agree or disagree : Computers have complicated people's lives. 70
- People do many different things to stay healthy. What do you do for good health. 80
- agree or disagree: Teachers should not make their political or social views know to students in classroom. 74
- In your country, is there more need for land to ne left in its natural condition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing and industry? 80
- Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities. 55
colorful sunsets which was light.
colorful sunsets which were lights.
most trees of the forest had been cut and replacing them by nature takes time.
most trees of the forest had been cut, and replacing them by nature takes time.
flaws:
Don't forget punctuation marks.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 12
No. of Words: 237 250
No. of Characters: 1124 1200
No. of Different Words: 135 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.924 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.743 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.266 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 55 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 18 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.71 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.596 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4