Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind the bars.
To what extent do you agree?
It is thought that isolating criminals in the prisons is the most effective way to maintain the safety of the society, however, some people believe that some prisoners, who are not dangerous to their society, should be punished by encouraging them to do community work instead of isolating them. I strongly agree with this view for two main reasons.
The first reason is the fact that prisons create more dangerous criminals than the streets as it allows the gangsters to gather and share their experiences which encourage them to do more and more immoral actions inside and outside the prisons. This problem can simply convert a normal persons, who had to spend short time in the prison for a minor felony, to a dangerous criminal who may be dangerous for people’s lives.
The second main reasons which makes me believe that not all the criminals should by punished by isolating them is that prison ,in principal, is away to correct the behavior of the criminals, therefore any other punishment that can guarantee this correction can be adopted. For example, criminals who are arrested for driving under the effect of alcohol should serve in the hospitals where they can learn about the catastrophic consequences of their unwise behavior. In addition, community work helps the criminal to build their confidence and make them feel that they are integrated into their societies.
In conclusion, sending criminals to prisons is still a very effective way to keep the order in the countries, however, prisons can lead to negative results with people who are convicted with minor felonies and for those people, engaging them with social activities is more effective and it ensures that they will not commit more crimes in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'person'?
Suggestion: person
...his problem can simply convert a normal persons, who had to spend short time in the pri...
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Line 5, column 126, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...unished by isolating them is that prison ,in principal, is away to correct the beh...
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Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: IN_PRINCIPAL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'in principle' (=as a rule)?
Suggestion: in principle
...ished by isolating them is that prison ,in principal, is away to correct the behavior of the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, may, second, so, still, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06597222222 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6173255503 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527777777778 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.2975951904 177% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.4377429325 49.4020404114 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 182.375 106.682146367 171% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.0 20.7667163134 173% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157632158449 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725617287271 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649586431696 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109920135358 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734686177995 0.056905535591 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 13.0946893788 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.94 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.3001002004 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.1190380762 162% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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