Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind the bars.
To what extent do you agree?
It is thought that isolating criminals in the prisons is the most effective way to maintain the safety of the society, however, some people believe that some prisoners, who are not dangerous to their society, should be punished by encouraging them to do community work instead of isolating them. I strongly agree with this view for two main reasons.
The first reason is the fact that prisons create more dangerous criminals than the streets as it allows the gangsters to gather and share their experiences which encourage them to do more and more immoral actions inside and outside the prisons. This problem can simply convert a normal persons, who had to spend short time in the prison for a minor felony, to a dangerous criminal who may be dangerous for people’s lives.
The second main reasons which makes me believe that not all the criminals should by punished by isolating them is that prison ,in principal, is away to correct the behavior of the criminals, therefore any other punishment that can guarantee this correction can be adopted. For example, criminals who are arrested for driving under the effect of alcohol should serve in the hospitals where they can learn about the catastrophic consequences of their unwise behavior. In addition, community work helps the criminal to build their confidence and make them feel that they are integrated into their societies.
In conclusion, sending criminals to prisons is still a very effective way to keep the order in the countries, however, prisons can lead to negative results with people who are convicted with minor felonies and for those people, engaging them with social activities is more effective and it ensures that they will not commit more crimes in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'person'?
Suggestion: person
...his problem can simply convert a normal persons, who had to spend short time in the pri...
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Line 5, column 126, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...unished by isolating them is that prison ,in principal, is away to correct the beh...
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Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: IN_PRINCIPAL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'in principle' (=as a rule)?
Suggestion: in principle
...ished by isolating them is that prison ,in principal, is away to correct the behavior of the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, may, second, so, still, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.5418719212 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 6.10837438424 164% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 8.36945812808 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 5.94088669951 269% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 20.9802955665 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 31.9359605911 116% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1207.87684729 121% => OK
No of words: 288.0 242.827586207 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06597222222 5.00649968141 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6173255503 2.71678728327 96% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 139.433497537 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527777777778 0.580463131201 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 451.8 379.143842365 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6551724138 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.5024630542 176% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.4377429325 50.4703680194 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 182.375 104.977214359 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.0 20.9669160288 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.25397266985 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 6.9802955665 43% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 2.91625615764 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157632158449 0.242375264174 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725617287271 0.0925447433944 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649586431696 0.071462118173 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109920135358 0.151781067708 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734686177995 0.0609392437508 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 12.6369458128 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.94 53.1260098522 66% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 10.9458128079 158% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 11.5310837438 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.32886699507 111% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 55.0591133005 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.94827586207 186% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.3980295567 158% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.