The following appeared in a memo from the director of International student affairs at Darrington College.
"To better serve the international students being admitted to Darrington College, we should build a new cafeteria catering to the students at subsidized rates. The current cafeteria is vary old and serves only expensive items and dishes, a point that will surely deter future international students from applying to Darrington College. Building a new cafeteria will prevent this from happening and will certainly lead to a dramatic increase in the popularity of Darrington College. Moreover, a new cafeteria will help Darrington College to justify an increased budget for educational iprovement this year. Building a new cafeteria will therefore be a great step towards enhancing the ranking of Darrington College."
The memo from the director of International student affairs at Darrington college seems specious, specially due to the absence of explaination of current situation or past issues or evidences that led him to declare that provisioning cafeteria facility is the only way to improve college ranking. We need to evaluate the situation based on requisite information and specific evidence to analyse the validity of the predicted outcome.
Firstly, any college of higher learning is ranked not just by the quality of its cafeteria, but the research potential of the departments and faculties, student teacher ratio for teaching, future opportunities for the students or alumnus, value of knowledge provided by the subjects and vision oriented learning, etc. The condition of its cafeteria is judged much later by any student and is menial when it comes to prioritising its offerings. That is because the food offered by the cafeteria can be good or bad, expensive or cheap- the students can find other sources to satiate their needs. But the fees already paid by them for the college education, and future that entails is what the students will look forward to, rather than judge the college by its cafeteria.
Secondly, we need a lot of data regarding the needs of international students and past trends if we assume that all of the above regarding quality of education is already taken care of, which matters for enhancing its ranking. As in, what kind of food is expected by the students of different countries, or do they enjoy the vernacular food over their regular country food? Do the past trends showcase that the international students have been purchasing just the low priced food? What percent of international students visit the cafeteria on a regular basis, or if they do on irregular basis where do they prefer to eat? The current condition of the cafetera, as the memo specifies that its very old, and the pricing increments in the past for their menu items. We need to conduct a survey for the students, asking them these concerned objective and subjective questions, to analyse and validate inferences about the future steps to improve upon and avoid the cafeteria conditions to deter future international students. We need to understand the severity of improving upon or building a new cafeteria altogether on the basis of developed inferences to relate it with the supposed dramatic increase in the popularity of Darington college.
Lastly, we need to check if funds are available for such an operation, as the memo suggests that the cafeteria building will help justify an increased budget for educational improvement this year. This in relation with all the above to consider the priority of choosing cafeteria new building over other requirements- towards enhancing the ranking of the Darington college. Only then can we validate the predicted result that the popularity of the Darington college will thus improve leading to a dramatic increase in applications of international students, thus proving to be a great step towards enhancing the ranking of the Darington college.
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- The following appeared in a memo from the director of International student affairs at Darrington College."To better serve the international students being admitted to Darrington College, we should build a new cafeteria catering to the students at subsidi 82
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 504 350
No. of Characters: 2547 1500
No. of Different Words: 238 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.738 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.054 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.81 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 171 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 119 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 75 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.748 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.187 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 113, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...dents and past trends if we assume that all of the above regarding quality of education is...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, thus, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2598.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 504.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15476190476 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86444998144 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480158730159 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 834.3 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.1336627719 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.375 119.503703932 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5 23.324526521 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6875 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283005760607 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901395536894 0.0743258471296 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481737283925 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166806854358 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297026052266 0.0628817314937 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 48.3550499002 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 98.500998004 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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