Some people believe that the earth is being harmed by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the earth a better place to live. What is your opinion?
A controversial issue in our lives is to upkeep our goods and keep our surroundings clean and pleasant while we may not completely care about a little farther from our private location. Earth, as a common home to everyone, is not an exceptional to this issue and all of us as those who live on it have to be careful about what we do. Totally, in some cases I do agree that us humans are harming the beloved earth but on the other hand, there are some points that satisfy me that we are not such a harmful creatures.
From the first point of view, I do believe that human kind has a growing population in a limited living place that leads to unavoidable destruction of the nature. The former house of other creatures in the nature will be the floor of our future houses, while they will not probably be just in one floor, but what is the solution? While skyscrapers only have room for a limited numbers, what should the others do about finding a living place? When you have to do something that is bad naturally, only if it is highly necessitated, one should not blame you for what you have done. It can be referred to the destruction of the earth for spreading our cities.
Furthermore, almost seven billion people are living on this planet that need energy, food, etc. We have some sources of energy like sunlight, water power, and steam. The last one is the most popular and in hand one because it can be achieved using the latent energy inside the fossil fuels. Burning them, fossil fuels release energy in form of heat or flame that can be used to boil water and use the produced steam to make electricity. These sources are very cheap and common; nevertheless, they are extremely limited. Other sources like fresh water and wood are limited too and need a huge amount of time to be reproduced and be replaced. Once again, we betrayed the earth and exploited its resources but there is no other choice.
Ironically to the two abreast aforementioned examples, I cannot say that I do not disagree with the statement that we are harming the earth. There are some more basic solutions like controlled population growth, replacement of some new sources of energy and artificial production of our daily needs rather than use some natural materials will help us avoid occurrence of the endangered future life of our next generations. Put all these aside, we should look at the results of our behavior that wounded the earth.
From what we have discussed above, we can safely draw the conclusion that this choice, either we are harmful to earth or not, completely depends on individual viewpoint and one cannot say that one of them is absolutely true. But, were I to chose, I would prefer to choose the latter one due to some bad scenes and landscapes that we see within our vacation trips toward countryside an some other natural places where not only the nature is ruined, but also so many kinds of wild animals are completely disappeared.
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Sentence: But, were I to chose, I would prefer to choose the latter one due to some bad scenes and landscapes that we see within our vacation trips toward countryside an some other natural places where not only the nature is ruined, but also so many kinds of wild animals are completely disappeared.
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There are some more basic solutions like controlled population growth, replacement of some new sources of energy and artificial production of our daily needs rather than use some natural materials will help us avoid occurrence of the endangered future life of our next generations.
There are some more basic solutions like controlled population growth, replacement of some new sources of energy and artificial production of our daily needs rather than use some natural materials which will help us avoid occurrence of the endangered future life of our next generations.
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