The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Linhjane on Sat, 08/11/2018 - 12:29

The pie charts show the percentage of the ages accounted for in the population of 2 countries in 2000 and intention for 2050.
It is clear that people in Yemen who are from 15 to 59 years old are expected to see a significant increase, the opposite was true for those in Italy. It is also notable that the age from 15 to 59 years is estimated to account for the highest percentage.
In 2000, the number of 0 to 14 years in Yemen was a second compared to only 14,3% in Italy. At the same time, the figure for 15 to 59 years in Italy was the highest, standing at over 61%, which was more 15% than this in Yemen. At the age of over 60 of the Italian which occupied for only 14,3%, which was much bigger than that of Yemen.
The year 2050 is predicted to witness some changes. In Yemen, the proportion of the ages from 15 to 59 years old are going to increase moderately to 57.3% while the figure for 0 to 14 years is forecasted to see a significant decrease by 13%. Simultaneously, people who are 60 years old are going to rise marginally. By contrast, the number of 0 to 14 years and over 60 years is estimated to experience a slight downward trend, standing at 11,5% and 46,4%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 266, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...decrease by 13%. Simultaneously, people who are 60 years old are going to rise marginal...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 33.7804878049 139% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 953.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 227.0 196.424390244 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.19823788546 4.92477711251 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4960758272 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458149779736 0.547539520022 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 283.5 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8607976672 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.7 5.23603664747 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129032215738 0.215688989381 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664859991176 0.103423049105 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625797388854 0.0843802449381 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111295712584 0.15604864568 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074881626261 0.0819641961636 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.98 61.2550243902 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.38 11.4140731707 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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