Instilling a sense of cooperation in young people is, if not the best, a very good way to prepare them for
leadership roles.
It may be true that competition hinders mutual development of peers
and as a result younger generation may find themselves underprepared
for the challenges they face in their careers in their respective fields. But, the above argument may not
be necessarily true in all the circumstances.
Competition may instill hostility towards each other among peers. If some youngsters are successful
and are gaining
importance, their less successful peers may have intense jealousy towards the successful person. This can
create rift
among them, thus hindering mutual sharing of experiences. Even the most successful person can gain knowledge
and experience by discussion.
That said, competition is not always bad, if taken in the right spirit. Success of one person may
encourage others to to better him/her. This mutual sense of competition encourages each individual to perform
better than the others. For, instance if we consider sports, a sense of competition may encourage a peer of Usain
Bolt to break his world record of running hundered meters in 9.68 seconds. This is definitely a good sign for
improvement of the sport. This can be true even in the case of government, industry or any other field. A sense of
competition among elected represtatives can lead to greater development of their respective constituencies. Each
elected representative in this case strives hard to perform better than others. This is true even in
workplaces. If the best
employee is awarded, recognized and if incentives are provided to him/her, this leads to growth of individuals
as well as the firm they are working in.
It is important not to get carried away by the positives mentioned in the previous paragraph.
Some might
argue that a sense of competition can sometimes prove fatal. If an individual, after repeated failures, comes
to a conlusion that he/she can never be better than his/her counterpart, then he/she may withdraw all efforts
at
improvement. An individual can get totally demoralized. This can have a negative bearing on the succeful person
as well. The successful person now has no competitors and he/she may never try to to improve.
Instead if there was cooperation amongst them, it would have been better for both.
All in all, it seems that instilling either competition or cooperation among young people has both
advantages
and disadvantages as oulined in the previous paragaraphs. It is thus very important to strike a right balance
between
the two. Too much cooperation without competition as well as too much competition without cooperation can
prove to be fatal.
Instilling a sense of cooperation in young people is, if not the best, a very good way to prepare them for
leadership roles.
It may be true that competition hinders mutual development of peers
and as a result younger generation may find themselves underprepared
for the challenges they face in their careers in their respective fields. But, the above argument may not
be necessarily true in all the circumstances.
Competition may instill hostility towards each other among peers. If some youngsters are successful
and are gaining
importance, their less successful peers may have intense jealousy towards the successful person. This can
create rift
among them, thus hindering mutual sharing of experiences. Even the most successful person can gain knowledge
and experience by discussion.
That said, competition is not always bad, if taken in the right spirit. Success of one person may
encourage others to to better him/her. This mutual sense of competition encourages each individual to perform
better than the others. For, instance if we consider sports, a sense of competition may encourage a peer of Usain
Bolt to break his world record of running hundered meters in 9.68 seconds. This is definitely a good sign for
improvement of the sport. This can be true even in the case of government, industry or any other field. A sense of
competition among elected represtatives can lead to greater development of their respective constituencies. Each
elected representative in this case strives hard to perform better than others. This is true even in
workplaces. If the best
employee is awarded, recognized and if incentives are provided to him/her, this leads to growth of individuals
as well as the firm they are working in.
It is important not to get carried away by the positives mentioned in the previous paragraph.
Some might
argue that a sense of competition can sometimes prove fatal. If an individual, after repeated failures, comes
to a conlusion that he/she can never be better than his/her counterpart, then he/she may withdraw all efforts
at
improvement. An individual can get totally demoralized. This can have a negative bearing on the succeful person
as well. The successful person now has no competitors and he/she may never try to to improve.
Instead if there was cooperation amongst them, it would have been better for both.
All in all, it seems that instilling either competition or cooperation among young people has both
advantages
and disadvantages as oulined in the previous paragaraphs. It is thus very important to strike a right balance
between
the two. Too much cooperation without competition as well as too much competition without cooperation can
prove to be fatal.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, so, still, then, thus, well, as to, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2338.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 438.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33789954338 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02729395059 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502283105023 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 703.8 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.9453562452 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5925925926 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2222222222 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 28.0 4.97078651685 563% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 24.0 7.80617977528 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332273655555 0.243740707755 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810455897731 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.097092254626 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0904398541339 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10871214234 0.0667264976115 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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