students by helping primary school students to read and do mathematics want to help others.
By looking at earth from the space, people realize there is no border between countries, and all the humans belong to one planet. This point can illustrate the necessity of helping others as a duty of each individual. Among different ways people can help others, educating youngsters leads to valuable results which can make it the best way of helping the world. In my view, if some university students want to make a positive effect, they can do it by helping young students to study better. I will elaborate on my opinion with the following reasons.
First and foremost, university students by teaching primary school students, can help to educate a generation that can make big changes in the future and solve different problems. Education system is complicated and takes lots of time, but by considering all positive and long term effects it can have on the society, its importance seems more clear. At the first sight, helping young generation to study and do mathematics may seem irrelevant to helping the world, but by educating these talented people who are eager to learn more, they can create valuable results which last for even decades. These educated students can help the society to solve lots of problems in the future. This point proves why educating young students can be the best way of playing a positive role in this would. My own life experience is a compelling example of this point. Five years ago, I did a volunteer job in an elementary school and helped student to study more effectively. As a result of my work, some students could participate in international competitions and win gold medals. Some years later, they started their project on construction of some elements which are stable in humid climates, and could make a big chance in construction industry of my country.
Second, university students have experienced different education systems and know them well which makes them able to use them for teaching others in a way the find most useful. All university students have spend at least fifteen years in schools and it has brought them a noticeable amount of experience about education methods. They have seen the effects of different methods, and clearly can states which one could have the best effect. As a result, they can use this great experience and help young students to study by useful methods. Finally, studying in a good education system brings more desire for studying and helps both the whole society and students. For instance, my aunt in a teacher and spends all her free-time in school. She tries to help students realize which studying technique is the best for them and has resulted in helping many of students to study better. Some of her students have became well-know doctors in my country, Iran and could play a significant role in their society. In my eyes, all the positive effects those people have are thanks to the hard effort of my aunt for helping them to educate better.
To sum up, by looking around, all the people can notice various ways which can help others. Among all these ways, helping young students to study better can have more positive effects which will last longer as well. It creates a well-educated generation which can play a significant role in solving some problems in the future. Moreover, it help these youngsters to study in the best possible method and learn more. Based on these justifications, my conviction is that university students by helping younger students in their studying can play a good role in their society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, well, at least, for instance, as a result, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 9.8082437276 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2929.0 1977.66487455 148% => OK
No of words: 597.0 407.700716846 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90619765494 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60452907127 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430485762144 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 906.3 618.680645161 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6188103605 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.607142857 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3214285714 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8709677419 202% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311570002733 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103629779842 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893735203001 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228366805042 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260117241518 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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