If there is a way to improve yourself, which one among the three choices you would take?
1- Take more exercise
2- Eat healthy food
3- Reduce the amount of stress
Throughout history, all human beings have been willing to improve their lives since their lives’ quality have a direct connection with the level of their societies progression. There are a variety activity that people can accomplish to enhance theirselves. For instance, doing some exercise, consuming healthy food, and decreasing anxiety in among those activities. I, to a great extent, hold this viewpoint that the best way of someone enhancement is doing more exercise. Among countless reasons, which can vindicate my point of view, I will mention the two most conspicuous ones through the following paragraphs.
The first reason that juts out of my mind easily at the first moment of thinking about this issue is the fact that doing exercise helps individuals to reduce their stress. Indeed, in the present time, all people have endured high amount of anxiety in their jobs, their study and so on. Therefore, doing some exercise during the week, would provide an opportunity for them to relieve their anxiety and for some hours be calm. To shed more light on this matter, the noteworthy statistics revealed by a recently conducted research shown that persons who do exercise regularly have more tranquility, and as a result, they are able to make perfect decisions. In this research two groups of people were studied. In one group, all members had regular physical activities during a year, but another group’s members were asked to do no exercise. At the end of the investigation, not only were people in the former group more relax but also they had better performances and were able to decide more effectively. As it is clear, the more individuals have physical activities, the more benefits they would gain.
The second and equally exquisite proof for this assertion is about this importance that by technology development individuals have less physical activities than the past, this means that nowadays they are more exposed to a great hosts of diseases, such as obesity, diabetes and many other similar sicknesses. Not only are these diseases suffering but also sick people have to spend a hoard of money for remedial processes. However, by doing exercise, human beings can prevent these sicknesses from happening and have healthy lifestyles. For example, it is unlikely that a man who has physical activities during his life, become obese. Indeed, he would sicken less than others; therefore, he pay less money for treatment programs and enjoy his life profoundly. Consequently, it is highly recommended that all individuals put some time for doing exercise in their daily schedules.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that in order to improve their lives, all people should spend some time doing exercise. This contention is due to the fact that by doing so they will become both mentally and physically more healthier. Therefore, the best way of improvement is having physical activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 884, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
... the end of the investigation, not only were people in the former group more relax b...
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Line 4, column 281, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
...ill become both mentally and physically more healthier. Therefore, the best way of improvement...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2495.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16563146998 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75548280114 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534161490683 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 785.7 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9057042905 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.409090909 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9545454545 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31818181818 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102837502563 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0342441925515 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0296509271385 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0691306848175 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276385859679 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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