TPO 46 _Task1
The reading and the lecture are both about use of electronic recording of medical records instead paper-based records. While the passage states that there are several benefit to use and save electronic datasets the lecture contradicts these clam and provides evidence to the contrary.
First, the author argues that electronic medical records can decrease the cost because paper records need to more space for saving and also need expences to fax and transport. Conversely, the lecturer brings the idea that doctors adopting with electronic records, have to save paper record as backup version and still pay for the saving. So this is not convince reason to use electronic records.
Second, the reading passage holds the view that electronic records can prevent the mistake causing by poor handwrite, human error and also error in registerating data. In contrast the professor underlines the idea that increasing the use of electronic records cannot remove the human faults. This is because, most doctor still use paper records and take note by hand. Besides, the stuff register the electronic form from the handwrite data. Thus, in this way, human error still remain.
Furthermore, according to the reading passag raising the use of electronic patient's records make a brillient dataset for the researchers and are available from any research location. While, the lecture makes it clear that researchers need to a lot of permision to access these datasets and also they need to the patient's permition. Besides, in some cases patients block the use of their medical records.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun benefit seems to be countable; consider using: 'several benefits'.
Suggestion: several benefits
...While the passage states that there are several benefit to use and save electronic datasets the...
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Line 2, column 353, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'convinced'.
Suggestion: convinced
...till pay for the saving. So this is not convince reason to use electronic records. Seco...
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Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
...nd also error in registerating data. In contrast the professor underlines the idea that ...
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Line 3, column 421, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...stuff register the electronic form from the handwrite data. Thus, in this way, human error st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, conversely, first, furthermore, second, so, still, thus, while, in contrast, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1327.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 252.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26587301587 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56285005966 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531746031746 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 419.366225166 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0830149987 49.2860985944 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.076923077 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3846153846 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06452816374 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.534913679662 0.272083759551 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.195049576346 0.0996497079465 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11449620961 0.0662205650399 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.339464282937 0.162205337803 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592965543044 0.0443174109184 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.3589403974 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 53.8541721854 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.