Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about the dangers of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree?
People differ greatly in their views whether talks by ex-prisoners should be held at school to inform students of the threats when a crime is committed. While acquisecing that this practice is beneficial in a few ways, I would contend that there are many better methods to educate students about the dangers of crimes.
There are two compelling reasons why there are certain benefits of having exprisoners talking to students about the hazards that are associated with crimes. First and foremost, Students may learn the dangers of doing a crime to the victims from those who committed a crime. To explain, notonly do these ex-criminals have surely gathered knowledge about the threats of crimes from their own wrongdoings but they also understand from communication with other prisoners. Furthermore, this method may educate students about the threats to the offenders themselves when they carry out a crime. This is because ex-prisoners are those who underwent and a long process of imprisonment and rehabilitation.
However, I am firmly convinced that some crime education methods play a more significant role in teaching students the hazards when crimes are done. The most important measure is to introduce criminology as a subject at school. A clear explaination forr this is that while the life-stories of ex-crinimals are often biased, criminology knowledge is scientifically proven, thus be more reliable than a few individuals’ stories. Another approach is to film the hard daily lives of prisoners and show it to school students. Although ex-prisoners’ talks can be persuasive, films with vivid images are much more visually attractive and more effective in informing students of the threats related to crimes.
To sum up, although I acknowledging that talks by ex-criminals may educate students about the hazards of carrying out a crime for victims and offenders, I would argue that some more stronger resolutions should be adopted to teaching students these threats, including the introduction of criminology as a school subject and showing films about the life of prisoners.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38787878788 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11721426812 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524242424242 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.8237849643 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.769230769 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3846153846 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230678911332 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832973649862 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493568032131 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144880168515 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382294833478 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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