Spending money on traveling and vacation vs. saving for future.
There are a story about the Chinese old woman and the America woman, in which the Chinese is used to save money while the American is accustomed to consume. Both of the two kinds of lifestyle have not only the advantages but also the disadvantages. The spending structures indicates our attitude to money as well as how do we live our life. Personally, I would recommend the consuming money method as the following two reasons.
Spending money on traveling and vacation serve as a sort of investment to our mind. We are confined in our social circle, which easily strict our horizon so that it is difficult for us to open our mind, accept different viewpoints, and tolotate those who are different from us. To tavel and take vacation give us access to explore the unknown world and broad our eyes. To give you the example of Echo, a house hold Chinese writer, she has traveled many places all around the world, her books were compelling welcomed by the Chinese. However, at the early age, Echo was considered as a strange person and her relative do not like her at all. Then, afer years of traveling, she has changed her characteristics, a large amout of readers love her book because it shows the audience a lovely writer.
The traveling and vacation play an significant role in help us keep in appropriate health. In the 21st century, the whole world economy has been working in a circle, which brings us both the chance and the chanllenge. There is no boubt that under this circumstance, the current employees faced with high pressure and have to stay up night frequently for their over-load job. This devotes to the both physical and mental health problem. The mental health problem are much more serious than the physical health problem, since the developing medicine technology cure most of the desease. But to the mental health, it is essential for us to relax sometimes. Traveling and vacation are the majoy ways of relax. When someone is one the road, he can breath the fresh air and view the beautiful landscape, more importantly, he can forgete all the stuff of work burden. Definitely, this experience would benefit his mental health, which in turn focer the physical health as they run in a circle.
Although saving money for future give you chance to buy some luxury, the luxury goods pales compared with the benefits which traveling and vacation can bring us. As the saying goes, travelling is an approach for you to make friends with the whole world. We can keep mental health as well as broad our mind by traveling and vacation. So, why not traveling and take vacation?
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Sentence: There are a story about the Chinese old woman and the America woman, in which the Chinese is used to save money while the American is accustomed to consume.
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Sentence: The traveling and vacation play an significant role in help us keep in appropriate health.
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Sentence: Although saving money for future give you chance to buy some luxury, the luxury goods pales compared with the benefits which traveling and vacation can bring us.
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Sentence: We are confined in our social circle, which easily strict our horizon so that it is difficult for us to open our mind, accept different viewpoints, and tolotate those who are different from us.
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Sentence: To tavel and take vacation give us access to explore the unknown world and broad our eyes.
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Sentence: Then, afer years of traveling, she has changed her characteristics, a large amout of readers love her book because it shows the audience a lovely writer.
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Sentence: In the 21st century, the whole world economy has been working in a circle, which brings us both the chance and the chanllenge.
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Sentence: The mental health problem are much more serious than the physical health problem, since the developing medicine technology cure most of the desease.
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Sentence: But to the mental health, it is essential for us to relax sometimes.
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Sentence: Traveling and vacation are the majoy ways of relax.
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Sentence: When someone is one the road, he can breath the fresh air and view the beautiful landscape, more importantly, he can forgete all the stuff of work burden.
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Sentence: Definitely, this experience would benefit his mental health, which in turn focer the physical health as they run in a circle.
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