Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well
While some people believe it is very dangerous to try new things and afraid to take risks, I think an individual has to try new things and take risks in order to success. I will specifically explain my reasons below.
Firstly, in order to success, one has to be brave enough to take the first step and do what other people cannot. It means you must take risks to do things that may have potential danger. What’s more, people always pay highly respect to those who be the first one in their field. For example, Armstrong was the first man stepping on the moon. Nobody had ever go to the moon and know what moon really looks like. The space environment may be harmful to human body even with the protection of the suit. However, Armstrong was brave enough to take the first step. Thus, a successful individual must be a brave man who dare to take the risks.
Secondly, If a man want to success, he has to beat every rival in one specific field, that means he has to come up with an idea that nobody thought about before. Besides, successful people are often creative and love to try new things. Trying new things and learning knowledge helps them to come up with many extraordinary ideas. Take mark Zuckerberg as example, he is a very creative man who comes up with idea of Facebook. None of the business man had thought about this fascinating idea. With his effort and creativity, he became the most successful people in United States.
Furthermore, a man cannot success if he only does what he knows how to do well. A man can easily get bored if he does the same work which he is already familiar with every day. The tediousness from repeating same work can be a heavy pressure to a normal individual. Thus, a man who has no passion in his own work will achieve nothing. Therefore, trying new things means a man can get motivations and interests.
In conclusion, successful people are willing to take new thins and brave enough to take risks. In addition, the experience and knowledge which gained from trying new things ensure their creativity.
- TPO-44 - Integrated Writing Task 60
- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- Essay topics: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 68
- Do you agree or disagree: young people should try many different kinds of jobs or career before they decide the long term career of their life. 70
- TOEFL TPO 43 - Integrated Writing Task 85
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...ecifically explain my reasons below. Firstly, in order to success, one has to...
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Suggestion: risks doing
...r people cannot. It means you must take risks to do things that may have potential danger. ...
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Suggestion:
...rave man who dare to take the risks. Secondly, If a man want to success, he h...
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Suggestion:
...st successful people in United States. Furthermore, a man cannot success if h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59078590786 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47777112349 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49593495935 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4146318707 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.652173913 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0434782609 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.69565217391 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301317285671 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873018067373 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847844120493 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170987484285 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292467922926 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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