The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar graph explains the percentage of australian men and women in the different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. We can see the data as a percentage.

men in the age group of 15 to 24 were the most active physically in the year 2010, 52.8 percent as compared to 47.7 percent females. In the age group of 25 to 34, females were more physically active as compared to their male counterparts. Similar trend can be noticed in the age group of 35 to 44, which shows 52.5 percent active females as compared to just 39.5 percent active males.

In the age groups of 45 to 54 and 55 to 64, the overall difference between physically active males and females is negligible. both age groups indicate that the females were more physically active as compared to their male counterparts in the year 2010. both males and females are equally active, with females being slightly ahead by 0.4 percent, in the age group of 65 and over.

To summarise the data, it is clear that except in the age group of 15 to 24 australian females were more physically active as compared to australian males in the year 2010.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 921.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 202.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55940594059 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52561138564 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455445544554 0.547539520022 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 286.2 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0273261932 43.030603864 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.333333333 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 22.9334400587 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.222222222222 5.23603664747 4% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4108250491 0.215688989381 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.213279807729 0.103423049105 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.19876246866 0.0843802449381 236% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.313981399491 0.15604864568 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.162501190331 0.0819641961636 198% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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