In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?
It is true that some students and workers put more effort in their study and work than others. There are some possible reasons for this trend and I will give my opinion on this before drawing the conclusion.
There are two primary causes leading to such hard work in schools and workplace. The first and foremost reason is some people always desire to achieve their targets to secure their future. In fact, they are driven by their goals and completely concentrate on their study and work to get high grades or promotion in the future. Another reason is that some people come from an unwealthy family background. In this case, a poor student often try his/her best to get top scores to earn scholarships to reduce a certain part of his/her tuition fees for their families. Similarly, working people have to work even harder than their colleagues to support their families financially.
In my opinion, such hard work would result in both positive and negative equally. On a positive side, diligence is more likely to become a motivation to their peers or coworkers and contribute enormously to shaping their personalities. When you work with hard working people, you would feel more motivated than those who are surrounded by lazy students or colleagues. On a negative side, because they totally focus on their work and study, they seem to neglect other aspects of their life such as their family or social life. This would lead to a lack of closeness in their family, especially the relationship with their parents. Besides, their social life could be affected in a negative way since they spend less time on leisure pursuits or outdoor activities or with their friends. This possibly results in the high level of stress and pressure, which is a contributing factor to mental illnesses such as depression in the modern world.
In conclusion, it is understandable that some people do their best in their study or work to get the best outcomes. Personally, I think people should get a work-life balance to benefit both their private and professional life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 676, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, similarly, so, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93390804598 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6091495135 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537356321839 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.8228454088 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.0 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4705882353 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258385961159 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104483427666 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0917421755469 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191599288959 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061950537349 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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