Some people believe the purpose of education is to prepare people to be useful members for society. Others say that the purpose of education is to achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.
What education serves for has become a controversial issue recently. Some people believe that education can act as a bridge between individuals and their ambitions, while others insist that education can make them valuable and worthy to the society. For me, both views have their own validity.
For some people, those who receive enough education are more likely to accomplish their own goals. First, schooling is able to assist students to arm themselves with knowledge. In order to achieve their ambitions, it is essential to have a solid professional knowledge system, which would let them feel comfortable when they cope with professional problems. Also, education can help people achieve their dreams by expanding their social networks and enhancing their personal connections because school is a ideal place to make new friends. People always say that in life, it is not about what you know, but who you know. This means networking is a key to success, especially during the lowest low. In the 1990s, with the assistance of Bill Gates, Steve Jobs rescued the Apple Inc, so that we are now able to get access to all the Apple products. Therefore, with a stronger social bond, people are more likely to get help from friends; thus, achieving their ambitions.
So much for the personal ambitions, other people believe that making a contribution to the society is also a purpose of education. As our country develops, a roaming number of well-educated graduates is needed to make up for the shortage of talents, especially in some remote areas. Therefore, universities should shoulder this responsibility. Several years ago, a targeted-area students’ program was launched at Chongqing Medical University in order to improve medical conditions in rural areas. After their four-year undergraduate program, students would be assigned to a certain village or a small town to work. Those well-educated individuals would provide villagers with more advanced treatments and medical equipment, so local residents do not need to travel to major cities to get cured.
For my perspective, these two opinions are not paradoxical, and they can serve for our lives together. Being useful to the society does not mean that people cannot achieve their own goals, instead, in most situations, fulfilling our dreams also can make us valuable to the society
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... personal connections because school is a ideal place to make new friends. People...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 377.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24668435013 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87105596937 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586206896552 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3896030659 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.105263158 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36842105263 7.06120827912 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287960041375 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800036288864 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744001614413 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178159790026 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053796673811 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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