The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The line graph reveals how many people visited Music Choice and Pop Parade websites throughout 15 days.
Overall, while the number of visits for Music Choice peaked in the fourteenth day, that for Pop Parade was the day after.
In the first day, 40000 people visited Music Choice. Falling to 20000 visits, the figure increased three times and recovered in the fourth day. From the fourth to the eleventh day , the indices oscillated between 20000 and 40000 visits. Then, there was a dramatic rise to 120000 in terms people visiting Music Choice, followed by a sharp reduction to slight less than 80000 visits in the thirteenth day .
With regards to Pop Parade website, it experienced a downward trend from about 120000 visits to roughly 40000 visits during the first week. From the ninth day to the eleventh day, however, the figure grew dramatically to about 150000 visits. Having decreased almost by half, the index went up to just above 160000 visits in the fourteenth day and roughly to 170000 visits in the of the period.
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... to 170000 visits in the of the period.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 854.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 175.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25902525943 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565714285714 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 238.5 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4796787453 43.030603864 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8888888889 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4444444444 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11656748502 0.215688989381 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569047991225 0.103423049105 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472404294137 0.0843802449381 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0897200368888 0.15604864568 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334627111432 0.0819641961636 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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