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Never before in the history has the problem of education been such salient than today. since people treat education much more important, parents are likely to create some new methods to encourage their children to become more passionate about study. Recently, the phenomenon that parents give their children money as a reward for getting high mark in school has caused wide public concern. some people indicate that it will change children’s opinion on study, making them believe only money is the purpose of study. however, I contend that giving some money to children as a reward is a good choice, a choice that its merits weigh out its drawbacks.
To start with, giving money to the children as a reward can stimulate children to study harder. when children get feedback of their hard work, the study will become a happy job instead of just a boring duty. we cannot refute that sometimes study could be really boring, doing a lot of exercises, reading passages, working out math problems. so setting a goal for children is necessary for the children to keep their interests. if they could use the money to buy what they want as a gift, children will pursue the good mark harder.
Another reason drives me to indicate is that, financial thinking as an important ability which is useful to the modern people, meaning that we need to teach our children how to manage their own money. during the method that giving money as a reward, children will have a chance to manage their own money. parents will benefit children not only to their current life but also to their future. For instance, my mother used to give me some money as a reward when I was young. And I used that money to start my own account in the bank. After that, I would periodically save some money, which has already become a large amount of money nowadays.
Admittedly, it is unwise to give much money once a time when children get a good mark, since that the children will seek only for money during their study. The goal we expect is to encourage our children and tell them to pursue more success. however, if we make sure that children will not misunderstand the meaning of the reward and keep a health attitude to the money. it will be fine to do so. Judging from what I’ve mentioned above, I should reinforce my perspective that it is good for parents to give their children money as a reward for getting high mark in school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, so, for instance, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65813953488 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36309396516 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474418604651 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5449835567 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.380952381 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4761904762 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.088373983789 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0338256092396 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458315174752 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0681984107005 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622064813643 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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